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Tha realist
and Jo Jo

Crimson lightning flashed.
As acid splashed in smolderin' rains,
I woke up as the nightmare overloaded my brain.
Soon I knelt to seek and know His face.

...why was I slain with the curse of these visions?
Why did I happen to witness births in Hell's kitchen?
What's wrong with just visiting church with a mission?
And though we like to limit the words you have written
& seeing our Spirit murdering inner thirst for true living,
did we deserve this? We're Christians!
I can't bare to watch any more of this horrid scene
This warring with Thor, this gory morbid catastrophe
Littered with torn, screaming, horribly gutted children
Lead by an adored demon/villain with lust for killing
I saw him backed up by forceful trust from millions
and Lord, why do they actually have to bleed & die by the sword?
(...) ....now Lord, please hold up and listen,
You know our position, I told you we're Christians!
And what do you mean, 'that's my point precisely'?
I mean, can't we even enjoy our lifes, please?

Crimson lightning flashed.
As acid splashed in smolderin' rains,
I passed out as reality overloaded my brain.
Soon I stood before his throne of grace.

Dear Lord,
I can't even cry no more. My eyes were soaking in tears,
till I realized you warned me in this omen of fear
It made me wonder who was the real nefarious force
And question why you appointed me to carry this cross
Then it dawned on me that there will never be an Adam again
And the passion within loving hearts is shoved apart quickly
And one who ponders what happened to sin is lost in darkness
The consequences are there, now it doesn't matter who wins
But God, common sense is so rare, & if that's the truth
Why do I even pray, why did I take the time asking you?
I still believe in you, but what if it's needless to live,
What's the point of creating us if we shouldn't even exist?
(...) So it seems that my guesses were actually off
And that free speech also means there's action involved
For a second I didn't know whether to blame Satan or Eve
To accuse the liar or the woman who ate from the tree
And finally it hit me. This is the season when hope dies
And I can't do anything. That's the reason I don't cry

Crimson lightning flashed.
As acid splashed in smolderin' rains,
I smirked as the questions overloaded my brain.
Soon all answers hit me. I was blown away.

yeah,, thought it was quite well written....some ok multis n nice imagery....hook was a bit short....the flow was good for the most, fell in one or two places, but was picked back up, so....the main problem for me was the topic.....it jus bored me, other than that quite good......pZ...

well written, pretty cool multis, kinda liked it

It was well written and the use of vocab was good. I kinda got lost in a couple lines tho, but I liked the concept. I suggest trying another topic that people can relate to, keep it up...!

This was a pretty good piece here i thought...enjoyed the read....structure was pretty good in this....you had some alright multies in there, could have been a bit better i thought, but still good...your hook was alright....overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.

Werd^^^^

this had good structure, the problem is your lines got me confused, I feel what ur sayin just cuz were christians shit don't get no easier and no we will nvr understand, i think the rhyme scheme fucked up a little bit. I was feeling it but i had a difficult time reading it. Also you had great imagery. IT was about 7/10.pz and luv and thanx for the drop on wisdom

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Let God speak for the underground Psalm 49 16-17
16 Do not be overawed when a man grows rich when the splendor of his house increases
17 For he will take no thing with him when he dies, his splendor will not descend with him
18Though while he lived he counted himself blessed - and men praise you when you prosper-
19 He will join the generation of his fathers, who will never see the light of life

20 A man who has riches without understanding is like the beasts that perish