Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
03-05-03, 09:27 PM | #1 | ||||||
Guest
|
**Concept piece**Track : Life Of Miquel
IP: 736D B1B5
this track life of miquel............ need feedback on all aspects....... much appreciated::::::::
Track : Life of Miquel {rough copy#2} (hi - fi) Track : Life of Miquel {rough copy#2} (lo - fi) Track : Life of Miquel {rough copy#2} (download) Lyrics:::::: chorus X 2 ------------ Livin his life NO worries this kid posesses// pleases his shorty everynight wit a dozen roses// browses his block for the wrongdoing hes about to unlock// doesnt realize the troubles he holds be in his glock// ------------------------- Since the birth from his mothers womb hes been living in the projects// never commits any crimes but always is proclaimed as a suspect// Since 8 years old miquel has been in neglect and tries to stay outta dangers// his mother said be a good boy never disrespect others// miguel pleased his moms by being perfect unlike his 2 brothers// disliked miquel for outshining the 2 infront of there mother// Another year has gone by and the kid has just turned nine// his birthday party was a glorious event now he was top of the shrine// from a fine dine meal to G.I joe dolls by the end of the night miquel got a important phone call/ when he hung up miquel happiness plumited down to a decline// his friend said what is it prob/ miquel weeps and says the cops found my dad dead wit 2 shots to his head// tried to rob him and steal his car and his money which he called bread// ---------------- chorus x 2 ---------------- puttin the horrid past behind begins a fresh start in high school// star on the verge of a baseball scholarship and a girl bright like a jewel// classy devine design personality is cool and people that disliked her were pathetic fools// school consists of cruel people and hatred around miquel begins// beef between friends hears both stories and chosses 1 side by days ends// confused brain spinning more then a massive twister a year past and jus blew a blank// Miquel heart sank once his girl moved away sky's to him seemed grey// he knows he broke her virginity and that she'll remember forever// and he knows he will never encounter a pussy that is sweeter// Senior year now weeks away from the ultimate goal graduation// slight desperation he be in now stress about baseball and all this discrimination// glimpse of his past finally caught up wit him and reved up a fury of frustration// had enough of this life so what did he do// so he took his he thought of it as a vacation to see his long lost father// FEEDBACK............ |
||||||
03-05-03, 10:02 PM | #2 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: 399E F0FD
I can't understand you and the flow isnt to great work on your flows
|
||||||
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|