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Old 09-11-06, 06:25 PM   #1
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Dervla vs Po' Wit

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Check in due: 9/14
Verse due 9/20
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Old 09-11-06, 09:11 PM   #2
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i'm there. .
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Old 09-11-06, 09:58 PM   #3
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Wow..I have so much time, Lol @ dates. Check.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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Old 09-11-06, 10:34 PM   #4
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shhh, dates will be edited soon. But yeh, you will have just under a week to do verses.
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Old 09-12-06, 12:12 AM   #5
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good luck lola..

it looks like you use the closest technique and structure in topicals that I do (being a more poetic structure), so this oughta be good.

See you in 6 days or so.
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Old 09-20-06, 11:34 PM   #6
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Slave to the Gov.

The glisten in his eyes making me smile,
while he's controlling the wheel-riding down the Nile
mother nature tears splashing on the hard concrete
of the streets and I can feel in my stomach his lil feet’s.
any minute this baby will be eating the fruits of life,
with full of love and guidance till the day he dies.
Can't wait to see his eye's, I hope its like his father's
blue'ish like the skies-symbolizes that he'll go farther.
But the dead end comes to quick-the brakes hit,
horn blaring but it doesn't helps-Metals starts to split
in my mind, I'm foreshadowing the pain I'm going to feel,
my skin is lynching, I'm turning to an banana that’s peel(ing)
off its outer layer of life, every inch of it leaks in red,
finally the catastrophe stops, my vision is a blur, I c this head
that’s limping against the steering wheel-tears starts 2 shed.
My mind quickly jumps, the pulse in my veins pops out,
"the baby!", I grip my stomach with so much force- I shout
"Good God the baby!". Sirens blaring near and voices yelling,
"Ma'am we're going to get you through-" a voice interrupts my hearing
"Bartholomew" goose bumps takes over my arm "Baby-Bartholomew"
Laying on the stretcher-mother nature tears hitting my wounds,
and I pull my chin up, I see my husband standing in the wetness dew.

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This is the Half of my verse, and I know it don't follows the Topic, BUT if Peace grants Po'It a extension then I'll post my other half tomorrow and it'll make sense. Trust me. If Not, then I'll still post my other half..I'm tired, I got school so yeah. Peace.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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Old 09-21-06, 03:44 PM   #7
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^ She gets the win.

I slept on this cause' we had so long and the last two days my schedule was strewn tighter than a virgins vagina. There was no way in hell I was going to get on yesterday and the day before that I had only had half of what I wanted so I didn't finish it thinking I could squeeze in some time at the end of the day. But I couldn't so, This goes to lola for showing.
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Old 09-21-06, 07:19 PM   #8
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