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02-07-09, 04:32 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Art-Ificial
IP: 2B39 45F1
Art-ificial
-Lost artist of truth I am a servant with a passion, i have no means of regret. Choices have been made, but mine seems to double think. Passive amongst emotions, that dab at the fragile heart. My hands crinch and then FREEZE, a Kodak moment for the broken HE-art. My wrist seems wounded, but i don’t beg for any mercy... ...my eyes just need a tad bit of rest. -that’s all Eyelids seem to glue, to the skin that hides below... ...my energy to stare- has left me to hurl vomit over my thoughts. Cruel with the angels, they bless me with a kiss... ...to awake the hell boy inside of me. My skin they fondle over, sagging my words. Covering the wounds that sit, atop the brush i stroke fine lines with. Literal my design is minimal, but i stick the tip into minerals; that create art that are some what -subliminal Quote:
I have damned my self to forever, with people who want clones... ...with pastel outlines; i guess artificial. I remain in my colorful box, in confinement as a rebel. I search for a way out, but the world outside seems too small... ...for my burden. So i remain as a passive artist, creating such beauty with no notice. For the people who fantasize as i do, just for them to know i exist in a world -of such beauty
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02-20-09, 08:24 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 2210 2F31
Hey man, this was dope. I liked the feeling and passion in your poetry. You used vivid imagery and a nice vocabulary deffinetely accented the piece well. This had me captured in the words. Keep dropping pieces with feeling like this my dood. The structure was on point too and i felt the image you posted captivated your poem. Great work. I like the idea and the creativity. Nice original piece man.
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03-02-09, 04:53 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 7C55 5446
thanks sno cap word ill hit you up
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03-05-09, 02:54 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: D5E2 8F5D
great drop MR WRITE [you know who this is ] anyways, the structure is most deff. how advance poets drops, and you sir are one of those really man.. you had nice wording, very decent vocab i must say... also wow man it just flowed nicely.. and i got the imagery when reading your line's throughout your drop, keep it up man overall 9.1/10
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03-05-09, 05:23 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 7C55 5446
thanks compa my dude
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