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10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No cock sucking

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-12-08 at 12:20 AM

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dunmenuts has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-08 12:21 AM.

Lay Fear has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-08 12:27 AM.

I feel no-fear waiting for this queer,
i lay drinking a crate of beer waiting all day for him to get here.
Yeah big of you to say im gonna lose, no need to abuse,
aint you done enough of that hanging at the public loo's?
This a quick verse jus painting your true colours,
only men be your lovers,but dam y blame it on your brothers?
they had a choise just like you,
but you let them own you ass like me through+through.
Dont mean to rub the salt in, but you fuckers are revolting,
i must stop bringing up your life as it is,your kinda shit dont need promoting.


Fuck IT im tired 6:00am im pissed and gonna crash. Peace

ROFL........... Just read my shit, even tho it was 5mins work if i can call it that lol. shit was bad..........

Listen faggot,
Ya talents ain't commandin authority queer, I'll smack ya hard.
If ya skills acquire a mandate,...s'cuz they gay enough to act the part.
Actin smart, you won't ever get green so I'm smackin ya phoney.
Cuz fuck bein up to par. Ya skill is off enough to be practically bogey.
Tune your ego down, you'll get baked with my right fool.
Fuck chin music, I'll hit ya hard enough to give ya ENTIRE face a recital.
Your like a 'Belt faggot, n ya ashamed that I noticed it.
Your always wrapped around a dudes waist..an close to his dick.
Some people dont' add up in person, n fuck your clever half.
Few people look good on paper..an I don't recall a day a D ever has.

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Voted For: Lay Fear

I'm gonna give this to Lay. I shouldn't have to explain. But if you DQ this I'll just vote with an explanation on an alias.

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Voted For: Lay Fear

Some people dont' add up in person, n fuck your clever half.
Few people look good on paper..an I don't recall a day a D ever has.
^pretty much owned his entire verse with this line, haha, opener was solid as well, not a bad verse, 2nd last bar was pretty whack though, heh, but you dominated him either way

i almost stopped reading dun's verse after the first line.

v/lay fear

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Voted For: Lay Fear

ok this was a one-sided battle

lay fear outdone dun in terms of everything (vocab, originality, flow structure, and harder hitting wittier punches)

dun it is really a cop out to start a battle and then make up excuses for dropping weak. we don't care about how drunk you are just make sure you drop as best as you can, you could have always waited until you had some free time when you're sober before you dropped.

gay jokes are played so you have to make sure you drop some originality with it

for example just telling the other guy he has men lovers is outweighed by lay fear's 1st punch

and syllable counting is essential for making a piece flow

V// Lay Fear (by miles)

Your right dark thanks for the feed dude..........

Voted For: Lay Fear

v/ fear

i wasn't too happy with this battle (no hate)...but all respect is due to both opponents, front lines needs all the help that it can get. word. so without further ado...

dun:
try workin' with less filler. make sure that every line you do drop has a diss in some form within it...otherwise you're robbing yourself and givin' your foe an advantage. try tightening up your punches, throw some sharper personals, straighten up your structure a bit, expand your vocab...and try to add some multies when you can. other than that, i do see you makin' some moves around the front lines, kudos. keep the activity goin' playboy. you'll improve, just don't get too frustrated fam. the elevation will come with practice. stick to it.

lay:
no hate bruh, but i have seen a lot better from you. i think that you took it easy on dude...but im sure that you were busy with other battles and such, but in general, be careful when doing so. don't overwhelm yourself with a giant work load...it can become a terrible chink in the armor. word. i gave you the win because i think that it was clear that you were a bit more seasoned in the battle front. you dropped more punches (which were enough to make your point...but not enough to totally destroy your enemy), your flow was cool (a bit choppy at points...but more than acceptable) and you had a decent structure (overall). you are a nice battler folks...so i want to see your personal best at any given time when you drop, regardless of who it is that you're ridin' on. don't hold any punches back in the future, smash beyond a reasonable doubt.. stay consistent my man...wordness.

i see a bright future ahead for both of you gents. d: take your time to fully develop your verse(s)...and press yourself beyond what you're used to. lay: dont hold back. kill on contact. on a real note though, stay hungry my fellow battlecats.

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