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06-02-07, 09:12 PM | #1 | |||||||
dope
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suicidal thoughts
IP: 5F40 1ED7
suicide is tempting if you ever felt lost
der are so many people that need help across thought that are inside burst in our minds realising that this life has to be so unkind it makes no sense why we're here at all i feel ashamed to breath and even stand tall things went wrong the years have ran along your mind has gone what plannet am i on everythings wrong everythings wrong losing the fuckin hope to stay strong long to die tears run down from tired eyes look at life in dispise who are these guys people full of lies deciete forgotten lifes people with rotten lifes and battered wifes full of pain misory questioning do i live what is the point anyway even if i did am i important here we're all the same lifes a big game we're born and feel shame |
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06-03-07, 08:45 PM | #2 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 8719 57C1
links?????????????????????????????
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06-10-07, 01:45 PM | #3 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: 5EA5 6727
with a name like technique i'd expect there to be far ess mispelled words, step up ur vocab... this is also one of those pieces that are quicly becoming my biggest pet peeve... don't be deep for the sake of being deep, just say what u wanna say, and if it comes that way, so be it... okay conept, but played, try to come more specific and w/ better voc. next time, i have faith in u, keep writing...
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..." -Konchance my poetry: untitled |
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