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View Poll Results: judging by my rhyme what should i do next?
jump off a bridge & stab myself on the way down 0 0%
grab a chick lick her from the waste down 0 0%
toss the pen and look for work downtown 0 0%
start selling drugs 0 0%
drop everything incuding a job if i had one to pursue a rap/writing career 0 0%
keep smoking the herbs to help expand my rapping potential 0 0%
get a job and rap on the side 0 0%
go to school & abide by rules 0 0%
date a cougar with a lot of money 0 0%
sell my body to buy some studio time 1 100.00%
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Old 10-18-04, 06:47 AM   #2
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yo this is dope.
copy and paste it into open mic if you wont more more people to see it and comment on it.
my advice. cut down a few bar's a couple seemed a little stretched. Flow was nice. Structure's a bit off. It was hard to find the flow while spitting it.. but i actually liked this alot.
take it to the open mic forum and you wil recieve feed on it as long as you give decent feed to other's ish.
I also like the topic's thru out it.
the line's.
I concentrate to write this but I have an itchy nose
this goes out to those I admire most
heavens only daughter God only knows..
versatility like mine keeps tricks on their toes..
I'm in the zone but prone to low-blows..
From the streets to the bedsheets baby anything goes..
I can smell this jealous kat trying to stop my cyber flow..
when i spat this i stoped at spat these line's again because they appealed to me as some dope line's.

take it to open mic...

keep dropping ,stay active.
pz
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