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12-26-05, 01:12 PM | #4 | |
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Wow man, surprisingly a very well done piece. Usually I expect more underdeveloped for newer heads around Rv.
This piece was filled with just beautiful descriptions. You desided to utalize free verse structure which, I dont particularly like, but you pulled off very nice. You had a little scattered rhyme scheme that traced itself within the stanza's throughout the piece which I really like. It didn't make your words a slave to rhyme which in the end make the piece sound very real rather then 'Humpty Dumpty' like. Nice job man, keep up the good work. |
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