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01-21-05, 04:47 PM | #1 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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~Babylon~ Vs. Verbal Abuse (Middleweight Championship Match)
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Battles Go Up Friday Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time 20 Lines Minimum 40 Lines Maximum No Biting No Recycling Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week Topic : Forever Changed
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01-21-05, 04:58 PM | #2 | ||||
~Lyrical Nirvana~
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check............................................. ....
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01-22-05, 01:52 AM | #3 | |||
As Seen On T.V.
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forever changed. ok check.
weight champ'yons should get 50 liners. [just a suggestion] http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=173214 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...439#post1920439 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=173211 Last edited by eph : 01-27-05 at 12:46 AM. |
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01-23-05, 03:43 AM | #4 | |||
As Seen On T.V.
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Forever Changed a truely shallow story [setting : algebra] awoke just the same...as the day prior today's eve. the next dawn would be different, only in ways i can dream. shed sit along side of me, and i lean...over and feed her whispers. my eyes in a coma, cause her ora's like misdemeanor liquor. intent to blink & kiss her. what i need is a matchmaker. all those pity laughs i gave her & not to mention the mass paper. the sweet & surene letters... ive written, since ive met her. lines like..." your my dr. pepper, cause ya make my world taste better." you might not have noticed, but every chapter test... ...i inch my paper closer to yours, but you wont cheat i guess. i like that best about you, your candid... & most def independent. ya beauty is evident, cause i fell in love with you in less than a minute. member that day i was late to class, just to catch your eye. i asked for a hug, then the class replied with laughter high. & ya didnt say a word. but ya popularity is not of my concern. i dont care if ya had a thousand valentines, im your crush for sure. i sit in math just comtemplatin'...exactly how long ive wated. im not asking for marriage, all i need is some conversation. the other day i... stomped ya pic into the pavement. just so i could kiss your wounds. in time my patience... ..will flood the faces, i have ever exiled in life. cause you distill every thought that is not heavenly like. your presence circulates the nerves inside. when our focus aligns...even the glare off ya eyes is divine. i held the door for you, everyday for the past semester. and since september, ive been able to stand the pressures. we're flawless intwine, the way we met was no accident. perhaps it ment...much more to me, half cause im abstinent. ocassionally you catch on... so i play my tricks & call. never to fail myself or the hex, i pretended withdrawl. problem solved...all i had to do, was put on an act. front i didnt feel you, and let your heart react. motivated my week, so i kept acting for a month. still under a hunch...sucessfully i didnt stare at ya once. i began to experience self control again, like shrek... ...it didnt take fluke or obeasity to force our connect. my attempts to date you, are now non existant...their sober. ive moved on to pure infatuation, hence...friendships over. ive fallen for a different person, shes actually worth it. not cause shes not virgin, its that her photo fits in my wallet perfect. g'luck bab. |
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01-25-05, 09:23 PM | #5 | ||||
~Lyrical Nirvana~
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"forever changed - a son's demise" smiles and fun, a child in slums, wild and young a father looking after his last child and son but with these books i read, he shook his head took instead, said, i should be a crook instead theres no time to learn when chased by a jake or a fed still shaking his head, says,"son they takin' our bread so he turned to the streets, hustlin', burnin' his heat and i sat back and watched as a kid, still learnin to speak he turned my mother to crack, soon burnin' a sack i tuned it out, but soon i doubt will ever be able to chat now he stay on the run, always palmin' a gun headed for the darkside of the hood, all for his son and the rock would soon crack him, siruns flashin' lying and laughin', but soon becomes crying and askin' when will i see my son? or my wife and daughter this is my demise, lost love of my only father hated my self, but really just screaming for help couldn't deal the cards from the deck i was delt abandoned and left i felt, building up this aggression fathers lessons questioned, lookin' for hell, forgott heaven soul has lost luster, hatered building, lost mother i turned my back on her, life paused to suffer sister never talked, now all she does is scream lust of schemes,showed the streets, ajusted my means this life im sickened to pick it, this and prison visits turn visions to critics, dreams lost, now im crippin to git it I'm the son of Guy, happy doesnt last, and funs a lie the victim of a system that loves to see a sons demise dark clouds hover over me, will this weather sustane felt severed and maimed, lost child, forever changed ~Babz~
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01-28-05, 12:24 AM | #6 | ||||
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ill vote on this battle tomorrow so it will be a 1-0 KO if nobody else votes...
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01-28-05, 12:50 PM | #7 | ||||
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Verbal Abuse.......i really think that should be in some kind of hall of fame...it was one of the best topical verses ive ever read ever...
flow-tie, this was too hard both of you had an amazing flow...with the amount of vocab and detail you guys had shit was ill... imagery-Verbal Abuse, practically the whole verse shined on imagery...the words you used it was just amazing...theres not much more to say on this you basically had all of imagery...babylon you had some too but it just wasnt as much... emotion-Verbal Abuse babylons verse i didnt really sense emotion...when i was reading it it just felt like you were talking but didnt use the right wording to make it more emotion...verbals verse was great seeing as it was a better story...there were significant parts in the verse that made me feel like ...wow thats deep... beginning/end-Verbal Abuse, the beginning was good on both basically a tie but the ending is what shined on verbals part...i loved that ending it had a spark to it... but both did tremendously well...i just felt Verbal Abuse had more of everything overall for a fantastic verse... Favorite Lines: Babylon- lust of schemes,showed the streets, ajusted my means this life im sickened to pick it, this and prison visits Verbal Abuse- i sit in math just comtemplatin'...exactly how long ive wated. im not asking for marriage, all i need is some conversation
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01-28-05, 12:52 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: D5FE 7245
Verbal Abuse wins by KO
Verbal Abuse +5 Babylon -3
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