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12-05-03, 04:07 AM | #1 | |||||||
Flyweight
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broke with no hope
IP: 5A4B 6334
yo, let me tell you were i come from deep down and real/
truth so sweet, it be an orange waiting to get pealed/ these downtown streets in l.a you gotta feel/ were people find the concrete mighty tasty lookiin fo a meal/ as i search for a derection, fucked up when fu's hit dat inasection/ like a fork on a road, my mind stuck cold not knowing were to go/ just gettin high and see humanity flow to this sad show/ get ya tickets right in the front row, miserable character like moe/ neva seeing beyond, just fu's seeing fu's back forth on dat dope/ they faces tell tha whole story of no hope tug of war./ world spins while we still deep in tha crust headin for da core/ trying to still find dat way out, but da system has us fo shure/ in their grasp, running a lapse around the city were love is shitty/ people around the west part of l.a show no pitty/ fuckin woods have it all while we suffer like da needy/ scraps for breakfast and leftovers for diner../ so fuck da rich and tha hilton sisters, cuz i look like thiner/ everyday i feel a fucked up demeanor cuz othas live from our misfurtunes and no way i cant bring it cleaner/ i'll be waiting for hell to be over cuz i still be a fucking beaner/ to them and all they friends at starbucks can get to barrels full of led from my sawed off shot gun, quickly i be gone/ |
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12-05-03, 08:51 AM | #2 | |||
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IP: 59AD 8C08
reply to three other open mics, and post links to the replies, or this gets deleted.
thanks
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12-05-03, 10:38 AM | #3 | |||||||
Banned
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IP: 54F1 AB26
This was aight...Content was aight , rhyme scheme was nice , wordplay was aight but u need to up your vocab and multis
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12-05-03, 12:17 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Nice drop, but i thought the structure could have been better, jus up ur vocab and u shud be alright.
nice wordplay and content. |
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