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07-14-08, 08:37 PM | #1 | |||||||
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chance4change
IP: 21D6 AF37
the opposition is competition to overcome/i must by all means never succumb/my commitment to this chick is number one,even if i fumble some this rumble must be won/and we must be one together,ties never severed,lies never uttered..none!/
so my baby got babies/two daughters,i ponder if we can raise a son/like a break in the shade i see these rays of sun/hope i thought lost i reclaim at once/and to think i was on the brink of becoming just a lazy drunk..... can i get it together,clean up my sins?/ ......................unfinished..............ahhh hhh the suspense lol
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07-26-08, 11:47 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
this was not a poem,it is a rap and the mod should place it in the open mic forum.the purpose of a poem is to allow you to expand on a topic better and to create a better picture without being trapped within a certain flow to a beat.as a rap it is ok and has a nice bounce flow to it as a comercial song.
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