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Old 04-30-07, 08:18 PM   #1
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Contendor Match: Thomas (2-1) vs. Pious (2-1)

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ok i expect you two writers to get off to a wonderful start here by really proving who can write. now this is week 4 so its almost that time were we will cut two cus only 16 can make the playoffs so strive to be the best.

Battles up: April 29
Verses Due: May 4th


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Old 05-01-07, 03:07 AM   #2
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Check man. Goodluck.
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Old 05-03-07, 07:39 PM   #3
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ive never written to a picture before... go easy on me
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Old 05-04-07, 02:12 PM   #4
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Each footstep is an emotion,
It weilds pain or happiness,
For the one i love i shall
walk forever and always.
She breathes essence into
my bones and aroma into
the very air that i breath.
For she is my life.
Each footstep shows my
lifes ambitions, and what
i am to achieve.
Each footstep is a sound
inpediment, one is nature,
one is love, one is hatred
yet most of all one is HER.
Ask yourself have you ever
woke up in the morning,
looked outside the window
and sighed, well i do it
because of here, she breathes
air in my lungs, she gets me
out of bed in the morning,
she is my light, she is my
darkness, yet she is the one
who gets me up in the
at the break of dawn, and
she walks with me, she walks
my footsteps and brings me
back to heaven, I am her
and she is me...
she is my Aphrodiaté,
but best of all...
she is everyone of my
god for saken footsteps.

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Old 05-06-07, 10:12 AM   #5
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v/ Pious

I'm not going in-depth feed. Just voting.

Pious - Good verse, maybe add some more length for better writers. Nice multies, nice shit.

Thomas - You came with poetry, which is decent, but then again. Rhymescheme is a bit more catchy, and unless your opponent is going poetry, you are shit outta luck, because 9 times out of 10, the guy with rhymes will win.
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Old 05-06-07, 04:00 PM   #6
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Vote : Pious

Yep, as Jonathon said - no indepth stuff today.

Pious - a really close battle but you pulled this off with your rhymescheme and the complexity yet good quality of your verse. I must say - this was pretty good. It reminds me of - well - my style a little bit reflected, but nevertheless this was dope. Thomas - a cool verse, kind of a little sticky ice-cream little verse but some grammatical little things to fix in there. Alright verse though.
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Old 05-06-07, 04:04 PM   #7
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Pious wins, 2-0.

Thomas (2-2) - Pious (3-1)
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