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Old 03-12-09, 02:01 AM   #1
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J.Roy - Keep Your Head Up

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I did this short piece for an old friend. She ended up not wanting to be friends anymore because of some crooked stuff but I felt the need to write this for her.

So check it out, let me know what you think.


http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7417304

and yes steve swagger I have your stuff done, I just need to upload it.
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Old 03-12-09, 02:35 PM   #2
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Vocals are a bit low.

Auto tune is killin the whole song. The chorus could use something else...like a whole new chorus. It really bores and makes me wanna slit my wrists.

Other than that, quality is cool and lyrically its cool. I like how you flow on it.
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Old 03-18-09, 01:26 PM   #3
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oh shit I forgot I posed this lol.

Thanks for the feed.
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Old 03-19-09, 11:46 PM   #4
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ima have to go with implicit on this dude

if you can't actually sing without auto tunes, then auto tunes won't help you that much, other then that the flow was cool, fast paced and shit, I like your emotion and delivery and swagger and presence and blah blah all that shit, the lyrics were OK, I guess... you said the same words too many times tho

this was alright, i've heard a lot better from you man
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