Topic: The End
Verses Due: Jan 9
Voting Ends: Jan 12

In......good luck, peace, 1

votes:

1. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...375#post1073375

2. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...417#post1073417

3. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...457#post1073457

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Hey yo....i'm droppin tamorra evenin.............i got a name change, peace, 1

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Disclaimer: this topic was very general, n' if there is anything that you dont get about it, either ask me.. or dont vote at all.
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The Noble Man
The Crude Man
God
Satan
(figured if i was battled Maddawg.. id go his style )
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The end. Whats the end?
Is the end the meeting again of fallen women n' men?
or is the end the taking of lives of those who pretend to be friends?
Is the end meant to test ment of their best?
or is the end a temporary relent for things we forget?
Is the end an inevitable regret, a step to understand the parables of death?
Is the end in fact, really the end?
Hellbound or Heavensent?

Professor: Class is out in 2 minutes, for free time to spend
But before break is finished, you must un-lock the meaning to "the end"

.. The man who belitted few ..
Raised into a poor family.. father abusive..
yet, hes still standing, against things thought conclusive
Images he started to grasp.. n' details they were coensigned with
But the details he had, didn't fit the criteria of the assignment..
He had to act.. To un-vail this missed mean..
So he'd politely ask.. jews, blacks, women n' gypsies..
Recorded responses.. if it helped, he was un-certain..
Were these what he wanted?.. or was he askin the wrong person?
Hours he searched.. A search undiscovered..
Coward to hurt.. Was it worth another?
Opened the door to his brain, Let other distractions crawl out..
But now w/ his mind blank.. Still couldn't find the Answers he sought out..
Then he got a call.. A man who said he knew the meaning..
Said he was the answer to all.. Was it real or was he dreaming?
He tried to believe, but vowed to stop..
Thats until he seen.. A number on his countertop
Dialed the number to see him.. The sounded strange..
He told him to meet him.. On the corner of east n' main..
He was so focused.. didn't look at the note it was packed in..
That he failed to notice.. roman text w. a hint of latin..
he gandered at his feet.. on the sidewalk he strolled..
Look up to the street.. One block less to go..
Helped the homeless, held strong for the weak..
Observed to notice.. A humble man waving him across the street.
Pacing down the ave.. he felt sumthin inside him..
Next to him was a man.. he was not but two inches behind him..
He was so enchanted, from the mans light that he'd dream..
Stepped in traffic.. a horn then he seen............

.. The man who belittled many ..
A church-going family he was born.. but as he god old
The teachings he ignored.. n' subsided the knowledge he was told
He got into college.. With the love from his parents help..
The knowledge un-aknowledged.. he preferred to do it himself..
He was a genious, or so was his oath.. for things he had plans for
Strangled men at their throats.. in demand for an answer..
He wasn't passionate, thats theoretical.. However, oblivious..
His issue wasn't medical.. Just naive about his differences..
Remembered for regress.. n' delivered counts..
yet, nevertheless.. Thought he had everything figured out..
Thought he figured the professor.. The answer wasn't as hard as it seem..
But off the record.. he couldn't prepare to an improbable dream..
He lived alone.. though he thought it hard to believe..
he didn't answer his phone, but heard the humble man over his answering machine
"east and main" he wrote down.. whether he was angered or not
He left his home.. n' his front door un-locked..
'it better be for something'.. walkin torward the intersection,
he stole the poors' money.. n' led a blind person in the wrong direction..
Pacing down the ave.. he felt sumthin inside him..
Next to him was a man.. not but two inches behind him..
His head jerked in aww.. what dream had he in fact struck?
to distracted to have saw.. that when he looked up they seen.....

the grill of mack truck..
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[I] a large light, theatre ques.. where had gone the day?
large fright, to frightened to view.. it was judgement day..
There stood God , there sat Satin..
Do you know why your here? they'd nod.. then stood paitent..
The noble man was confused.. yet felt he would be alright
He would be for God's use.. and see gods sight
The crude man wept.. bowed to the floor, but didnt dare to look..
Why so upset? , because i know the parables of your book!
The noble man was loved.. (looks to god) "I am Loved by He!
But satan stood up.. You.. Come With Me
uproared his in dissaray.. he was going insane
lord, why am i taken away? .. lo' you never called upon my name..
(looked to the crude man), and though you intentions are not accepted..
To the book i stand.. Welcome to the kindom of heaven.....

whats so right about being wrong?.. is it right at all?
Should god have taken more long, to revise his laws?

When you whole, you get pulled apart
You wake up n' not know where the fuck you are..
So if forevers the beginning..
....when does the beginning of forever start?..

There is No End.. Life is Everlasting.. Just Bathed In Morals We Dont Follow..

Topic: The End

Intro:

Lyfe…it’s full of surprises. No matter who you are, you will experience both good times and bad. A few people actually believe that life is not worth living. On the other hand, many people want to live life to the fullest and dread it’s conclusion…Death. Here is the story one young boy who has gigantic dreams and dreads the End…

Lyfe:

He’s young, intelligent, kind, ambitious, and he’s…Lil Eddie Johnson/
Even though he’s only in 4th grade…tha world aint Ready For Him/
Lyfe is his chess board…and he understands that Heavy Pons Win/
Forget Spaghetti On Ten (min.), 9 years old and can Cook a Feast/
Not Stuck with Geeks even though he reads at least a Book A Week/
Hasn’t Took ta Streets…not tryin ta be homeless, lyke his Big Brother/
He’s knows about gangs, poverty, desperation and he seen Kids Suffer/
He lives with his Big Mother…no mom, no dad…soon no Big Brother/
He sleeps under Stitched Covers…all things considered…He Believes/
“Lord, please pray for my grandma and help her Breath with Ease/
She Grieves for Peace…this violence and war Needs to Cease/
Thank you, Lord…Amen, wait…Next lunch take a Seat with Me”/

Beliefs:

Eddie’s Seen tha Heat…these mean streets…his only Scenery/
His Dreams are Chief…shoots for tha moon to land Among tha Stars/
He’ll be tha first Black prez…he’s carried his weight…Brung tha Scars/
His Love for God…has given him a kind heart and a Kind DeMeanor/
A minute house in a impoverished hood…you wont Find Three Beamers/
Listen…don’t Deny his Dreams First, a great mind and Great Patience/
Take tha Basics…enough brainpower to Debate Equations/
Enough courage to Face tha Nation…face Laced with Abrasions/
He Hates Racists…trust me…you cant meet his Intelligence Quotient/
He Develops tha Notion to put forth Celibate Motions/
Use Jelly and Lotion…so no more kids have to Suffer lyke He Did/
Heart broken…body Coverin Pieces, always has Supper with Jesus/
He Trusts in his Reason…and knows he can Escape from tha Hood/
Where kats Hate ta be Good, using God’s promise as tha Basis for Love/

Skool:

Tha same classes everyday…tha only student tryin ta Test his Mind/
He wants more of a challenge…so he always Invests tha Time/
Searchin for tha Best Design…Determined through Broken Focals/
Watches Chokin’ Hopefulls…sum one everyone Knows Too/
He’s loved with No Clue…ready to Expose tha Absolute Truth/
Considered So Cool…ideas on paper…and Begins to Rhyme/
He Spends tha Time and energy…to drop Extensive Lines/
He will get tha skools lunch…smile…and Pretends to Dine/
But he always dreaded being at The End…of the Line/

So he Cuts

Peace

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lol.......at battlin me with my style.........sorry bra............but i didnt throw in endless amounts of characters and colors this tyme......i switched it up, good luck......let tha votin begin, peace, 1

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Well its not really your style
just the end part is.. that why
i said it.. because it just reminded
me of yours.. Just throwin sum
creativity in that m'fucka

good drop by both.
enjoyed both stories.
Aus yours was deeper with more meaning. and more fucked up at the end.
Key- yours was pretty cool with a twist in the ending which I liked.


AUS..read your story liked the whole devil god thing even though It's been used before many times.the vocab was good flow good, not many flaws. all aroundgood.

Key..good too vocab was on point and multies were thorough.
and internal rhyming gave it a flare..but the stopry just didnt grab me as much. good twist but then again not good enough.


v/Aus.

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Dope Shit...
Both stuck to the topic well..
Props to both.......................

Auspicious
Alot of creativity
Flow was good
Wordplay was good
Imagery was good
Sunk in deep to the topic
Vocabulary was good...
Overall............18/20


Key-Low
Flow was good
Vocabulary was good
Wordplay was decent
Imagery was decent
Story wasn't that great
Coulda been worded
A lil bit better in places
Overall..........16/20


Vote-Auspicious

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this was a top noch battle here...
both topics were on piont...hit the topica well
content was great...imagry on each was about equal
the depth into this we're decent...deffinately championship material

this was all n all a reallly close topical battle..
but i hafta go with aus.. .he had a better imagry and great content to his topic

vote-aus