Verses Due: Saturday, January 24th 2004
Voting Ends: Monday, January 26th 2004

Topic: Current Status

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she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

preseason?
ight im wit it

In.

In as well...

Good luck to ya, Aus.

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Bootsie and Clyde were destined to collide...
Cuz they both loved the same girl deep inside.
She had them both on a rope : hearts enslaved...
It was easy to see, their current status : played.
Love's blind, from slightly crimson crystalline visions...
Thorns pierce like horns, draining egos without suspicion.
Lenses affixed, their permanence ensured by deception...
They're low on wits, so discrepancies avoid retrospection.
Despite being new to tha game, she's already Hall of Fame...
To everyone else they're hard, but with her tender and tame.
Crippled warriors, with only one life left to smother...
And she's growing bored, so she'll have them meet one another.
Simply leave a trace of Bootsie, and drop a clue from Clyde...
Have each one discover the other, then cry for having lied.
She'll say she wanted out, but the other wouldn't let go...
"He's been threatening violence, and you're the only love I know."
They buy the lies and comfort her cries, vowing to protect...
While planning revenge on a binge, and making things correct.
She'll arrange the change, coordinate a rendezvous ta meet...
Set up then shot up, cuz she knew they both packed heat.
Report to police, "I tried to stop em but they lost control..."
Case closed, With Bootsie in prison and Clyde in a hole.
So cold, her heart can't love cuz sanity's in death's throes...
Has her living life a huntress, current status : black widow.

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..Current Status..

Current affairs.. corresponding issues..
But not that we care.. for the life we live thru
You fear change.. change feels your fear
If you stay the same.. then whats your purpose here?
If material concurred it.. but you liked you health
Is it honestly worth it.. if you dont like yourself?
Or do you know who you are.. n' can make a river drought
Or is life to hard.. to figure out?
Is life on go.. or do you interpret them as the worst days
Or do you not know, who you are in the first place?

Envious Life
He was popular.. clubs and sports
observe, not inferred, w/ family support
Close to his pops.. for affection he needed
Vowed not to stop.. until he had succeeded
father encouraged.. the life he wanted his son to have
work, he learned it.. for the life he worked to grasp
best that school sports had.. needed no practice
will graduate top of class.. highest grade point average
got all the women.. and was right with God
goals, he'd win it.. n' was elected king at prom
all guys were his boys.. n' were there electin him
n' his parents rejoiced.. when Harvard accepted him
worked his fathers industry.. just to write or read
n' visibly, got one thousand dollars a week
had two rides.. a royce and a beemer
His thoughts obliged.. lived the dreams of a dreamer
He would plan to pretend.. to think they had a chance
Their hair would stand on end.. if he gave them a glance
He'd always give a like smile.. under strict stipulations
He didn't like the lifestyle.. but enjoyed the implications
His efforts valiently.. stored was before
and his personality.. was all plaques and awards
Met the president.. and could charter a jet
Kids resented it.. because he wasn't out of high school yet
Dreams he could tell us.. exercise extrenious
They weren't jealous.. just envious
Greeted w/ formalitites.. and done a bit
but in reality.. he wanted none of it.........

The Life He Envied
He hated the rules.. rules he was facin
He hated his school.. n' their expectations
He'd wast his life.. that he remembered to forget
cuz he spent all his time.. on homework n' tests
he'd wish he could say.. more than his text
he'd wake up one day.. n' hope for the next
Writtens he'd write.. were papers compiled n' mixed
He could stay out til nine.. but didn't get home til' 6
He wouldn't go farther.. he'd love to fail
So he said Fuck Harvard.. and went to Yale
never a minority.. because of the town that loved him
n' hated his parents for priorities.. they took away from him
Stories he was told.. information and lectures
He'd give up his soul.. for an 'F' and a police record
He was well-liked.. But felt alone
So he left to find a new life.. because he was deprived of his own..

If He Lived For Himself, What Possiblities Could Unfold,
What Things Could Happen?..
So Who Are You, If Currently, You Dont Know Your Own Status?

Born To Kill-Nicely written piece good vocabulary...
creative apraoch to this very well written
multis were great and wordplay had plenty...
an overall good verse from start to finish
the way it ended had a little twist pretty creative...

Auspicious- very creative nicely approached
this surprised me i thought born had this from
the start... but you surprised me... good
wordplay and vocabulary not much multis in there
but this wus very on topic and had twists to it
i like this verse overall more than Born's verse
just wus more into it....

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Born To Kill- Verse had nice little storyline to it. It seemed to lose focus on its topic though, when getting in depth with the girl. Thats where it was weakened for me. It had a nice twist ending but something I could've expected.

Auspicious- Nice job incorporating multies and very nice vocabulary. You stayed very strong on topic, many nice lines, and the emotions were put in wonderfully. It was emotional, and you kept the topic focused very nicely.
V/-'Spicious

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BTK-the best i've seen from you yet...the imagry n depth in this piece was good.. your flow could be worked out a bit better, and a limited amount of usage of vocab but that's coolio with me...you hit the topic good...but the whole girl thing i've read about millions of times

Aus-what the...that was dope..lol........the flow was tight...especially in the middle of the piece... your conent was very strong along with the imagry of this piece... i loved the twist...soemthing we weren't all expecting but yeah i started getting into this here... keep it up and u'll be back up contentding for that title

vote-aus


reason-better piece

B2K: First time I've seen any writing form you, acutally kind of suprised too.
The flow was choppy for me in the beggining but picke din the middle and at the end.
You sort of left the topic of current status though when talking about that girl.
Overall, nice verse, but nothing too special.

Aus: Your flow was on point all the way through, content kept me reading at my will,
Good writers voice, and the imagery was......great:::::::
overall it was a better verse. You both came well, but I wanted to keep reading your' peice.

Vote: Aus

V/ Aus

Wow Aus, your topical skills....every week seem to get better and better, and this week was no exception...you tell a good story here....good flow, i liked the concept....igood job

btk - Ive seen a steady improvement in everything you've written in the past month or 2....good job...umm i liked your twist on the story.....your flow was shaky at times....you had very good wordplay...but in terms of consistency you were lacking which is why aus won...but btk continue to improve your shit every week and you will get there

Vote B2k

Aus your verse was pretty damn good... & to be honest i was surprised by how much you've come along in topicals...

But B2K just surprised me that much more... i felt his story flowed better... it kept me reading... an overall really good drop man... you came a long way...

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Aus - your verse was nicely told, with a good use of vocab, well worded.... i liked the approach you took, and you stayed with it nicely thru... and it seemed well thought with feeling...
Born - i thought your approach was also good, but the flow fell a bit choopy in places, there was some nice wordplay, but the topic wasnt clear in spots, drifting a bit....
so im gonna vote=Aus, more concistent.... both were good tho

damn..this was some good shit..

Aus-oh boy.I was feeling it..except the first verse..didnt really like it..although it was like the introduction..but your story..I loved it..and it flowed perfectly..yes..I mean perfectly..it went..

rhyme1..rhyme 2
rhyme 1..rhyme2

and thats just dope as hell..and vocabulary was on point..my favorie was the 3 and final verse..I liked the..he'd sell his soul just for a f and a police record..haha..yeah..truthfully..this was some shit that I'll expect from a real rapper..like Jay-z..mad props man..

born2kill-and I actually came into the battle looking to vote for you because I never heard of Auspicious..you told an equally good story and you had all the things that Aus had..but Aus got you on the flow/multies..this was a good battles..and props to you too b2k..]
vote=Aus

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