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Old 10-03-04, 09:23 PM   #1
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"Death of the Sun: When Nature Strikes"

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-DEATH OF THE SUN-

The tear spot, my throat throbs
Life coats lies with low tides.
Stranded on the sandy beach with no ties...
Thrown by.
The chrome lights in memory
Flown by like a fairy but visually scary
Timidly staring, trilogy daring limitlessly
Lost my bearing and the history of certain things.
This dragon lost its wings
When it seperated from its family.
Capturing the picture graph of nature,
Stabbing leaves of poison ivy drops
Secrets locked, perhaps philosophy knocks
It's gotta be the prophecy I think
But it's not...
Just the past that's haunting me,
I thought I forgot.
The death of a sun, throbs the chest cavity
Above and beyond the battle beats
My tissues dampened,
Silence seeps.....devours
Reap the problems as a coward losing sleep.
Metacarpals fuel the key to type a seed
It's grown to breed this rap-like poem-like rap
To energize Hell from me.
Like jail I be but the cell has thickened walls;
Ghastly oceans overlooked
My hidden flaws now opened up like malls
Then close upon a deception took.
The Devil's prolific weapon is manhood
To test the fortress of faith with openness
Before it's understood and focused in.
My heart has died to be broken in.
.....................
And in the end it's been persistence.
Sealed in a closed coffin and still breathin'.
After the real beatings of punishment troubled,
I rumbled thunderstorms within a closed circle.
Feeling the feelings of emotion,
I kicked the turbulence of stress.
The solar kills the skin
But still I'm protected within my polar self.
A child and soon to be parent
Are the only two things you need to conjure Hell;
Contagious, spreading deadly fires
On the property of farmer's fields.
Offerings tarnish wealth.
The heart was closed,
Mind, body, and soul in jail.
Death of the "sun" (son);
Where the dragon is slayed
But his life has just begun.
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Old 10-06-04, 06:13 PM   #2
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atleast tell me this sucked
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Old 10-24-04, 12:58 PM   #3
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Old 10-24-04, 01:27 PM   #4
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yo I liked this this was real coo fam......I liked to read stuff like this......

good vocab and imagery dog nice shit.....
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Old 11-09-04, 12:03 PM   #5
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This flowed very well, and i liked the title and how you incorporated this in your piece,as different meanings, the sun(son), beautifully written, and it rhymed well too, i dont think anyone touches your vocab....1
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