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Old 05-08-05, 03:08 AM   #1
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°o.OTwisted FateO.o°

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Twisted Fate

Silently preying patiently on the wakeing dead
It waits for the perfect moment to make or break
You can't breach its sympathy for it is merciless
This essence is as inevitable as the rising sun

All efforts are fruitless, there is no escaping
Theres no fleeting from the twists of its nature
Try and foil its plan and you're only feeding it
Summon all reason in the world only to be foiled

Once it strikes, it chokes the truth out of you
It will blind you of meaning, and all you have
to say is "weird" never to make that connection
Never to realize that you are only a mere puppet

You are a marionette in fate's dilligent fingers
As he carries you place to place you're battered
crumbling apart from each wall he throws you in
You become time-worn, dull, and obsolete to him

Your strings are cut. Your remains are left in a box.

Strong drop,Featured for a week~FLUID
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Old 05-10-05, 02:51 PM   #2
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Dope poem, some great metaphors, i love when people use them the right way, you show an open mind in your writing and good imagination, keep dropping man..1
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Old 05-10-05, 03:31 PM   #3
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cool poem man, twas really well written, great thought put into it, a nice ponder poem....overall, the whole poem was easily relatable, and a well-expressed view on the many conceptions of what fate really is.........keep up man
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