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05-08-05, 03:08 AM | #1 | |||
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°o.OTwisted FateO.o°
IP: BC9E 8B9A
Twisted Fate
Silently preying patiently on the wakeing dead
It waits for the perfect moment to make or break You can't breach its sympathy for it is merciless This essence is as inevitable as the rising sun All efforts are fruitless, there is no escaping Theres no fleeting from the twists of its nature Try and foil its plan and you're only feeding it Summon all reason in the world only to be foiled Once it strikes, it chokes the truth out of you It will blind you of meaning, and all you have to say is "weird" never to make that connection Never to realize that you are only a mere puppet You are a marionette in fate's dilligent fingers As he carries you place to place you're battered crumbling apart from each wall he throws you in You become time-worn, dull, and obsolete to him Your strings are cut. Your remains are left in a box. Strong drop,Featured for a week~FLUID
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05-10-05, 02:51 PM | #2 | |||||
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Dope poem, some great metaphors, i love when people use them the right way, you show an open mind in your writing and good imagination, keep dropping man..1
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05-10-05, 03:31 PM | #3 | |||||
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cool poem man, twas really well written, great thought put into it, a nice ponder poem....overall, the whole poem was easily relatable, and a well-expressed view on the many conceptions of what fate really is.........keep up man
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