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06-06-05, 11:27 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Drama Queen (3-0) vs. Triple_N (1-2)
IP: 1AD2 C386
Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday
No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your poetry battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues! Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count! Your Topic:
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06-06-05, 12:15 PM | #2 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 1AD2 C386
Checkity Check Check
I'ma whoop ya fat ass Hehe, nah just messin with ya...g'luck cutie...
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06-07-05, 01:06 PM | #3 | |||||||
Ya mom massages my nuts
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IP: 5CE5 0C44
awwwww nall....I gotta face drama! ...well here we go..goodluck to you too
check check
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06-09-05, 07:35 AM | #4 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: B005 97A4
Extension granted till Sunday due to exams
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06-12-05, 01:17 PM | #5 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 46C2 FF91
Salvation Shattered pieces of sharp glass to create a cruel contrast That will last and where future is seperated from her past Motionless curled to protect her from a cold outside world Lonely and hurt girl as razor blades above her still twirled Streams raining down on a vulnerable body still on ground Nearly drowned when she found strength to utter a sound Wounded by a thousand knives until final salvation arrives Trust in Jesus as my homeboy for how he changed lives Flood of crimson blood faintly painting the bathroom tiles Marks on her skin to portray what's within yet she smiles Scars all over her thighs but there's a twinkle in her eyes Darkred fluid as her disguise as if she expected a demise Her scarred body slowly rises as He reaches out His hand One pair of footsteps in the sand as He says:" I understand I will carry you along my way to let you free again someday Rely upon your faith and every little thing in life will be okay Strive to become better person, mysteries will be revealed" As He puts up protective shield and all her wounds healed Knives turned dull, streams of blood converted into waters For Our Lord's always looking over His sons and daughters Try to resist the earthly temptation and love with dedication No matter how much desperation, always believe in salvation
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06-12-05, 01:58 PM | #6 | |||||||
Ya mom massages my nuts
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IP: DBCE DC18
I am pierced with each toss & turn, the springs stab like knives
When I lay in our once shared bed in formerly conjoined lives I position myself right everynight, so that the biggest knife slides in a inch to left of my spine an inserts deep in my heart's Left chamber, to stop the circulation of frustration & anger But still retains all the old blood stored on the right which hopefully contains some of the life I had last night Before u walked out da door & ran off wit my happiness Sense of self worth, an any reason for bein' on this earth Ya left me for the best pieces of me, I fill the holes nightly Insertin' these knives inside'em, preying they'll ignite thee Regeneration of the large chunks u removed from my soul But blood never clots, jus trickles out never wanting to stop Staining the knives with the pain that u deserve to feel Cuz only seeing your wombs will help me to heal But these knives can't pierce bitch, they only sever feelings But ya neurons seised firing in ya brains emotional center Winter gets a over coat when your outside in december Cuz your heartlessness plays the biggest part in this Attributed to your doctorate degree in the art of bitch But I guess I was your pajamas wit the feet inclosed Jus something intentionally made for you to outgrow
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Haters spend all they time hating on another's life
Then wonder why when presenting there's to others...no one looks twice Because at the end of the day, you get what you give So, when you consumed with his...don't get mad when everyone else is |
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06-13-05, 07:20 AM | #7 | |||||||
==bLaCk-HanD==
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IP: F792 A5CF
DQ-
Good vocab & flow in ur peice, u took dat aspect hands down, wuznt really feelin ur emotion & da creativity iz not da best i seen frum u, it wuz rather basic 2 be honest...nuthin 2 special in da content ov imagination, culd ov used da concept 2 much better effect, scheme ov da peice i wuznt feelin, where as Triple N wuz real creative, but ur structure & complex vocab made diz a real close battle, ur writing seemed more real & not az forced, everythin fitted into place nicely Triple N- Much better concept 2 ur peice, had sum iight emotion throughout, imagination wuznt really there, & ur peice seemed 2 make me loose intrest toward da end ov ur peice after deez lines; Staining the knives with the pain that u deserve to feel Cuz only seeing your wombs will help me to heal But these knives can't pierce bitch, they only sever feelings But ya neurons seised firing in ya brains emotional center Winter gets a over coat when your outside in december Cuz your heartlessness plays the biggest part in this Attributed to your doctorate degree in the art of bitch But I guess I was your pajamas wit the feet inclosed Jus something intentionally made for you to outgrow Seemed 2 lack concsistancy in ur whole peice, started off strongly, wit sum really meaningful & creative lines, then u let ur self go & i lost intrest, if u wuld ov kept da solid content ov ur opening lines, u wuld ov easily took diz because i honestly wuznt feelin da concept ov DQ'z peice Vote-DQ
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06-13-05, 08:09 AM | #8 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
hmm, i have to go with DQ....both of your structures were diff from what you usually do, to start off.
Triple...yeah, you started off with some real, vivid lines....but you really fell off towards the middle and end, i thought, and although i could follow it easily, i didn't like your rhyme scheme, even though that doesn't matter much, i think it still hindered you some in this one. but overall, you had a good idea, but you didn't keep it through till the end. DQ....i have to say, i really like your old style, i think your sacrificing alot of emotion, and imagery, with trying to rhyme so much....just telling ya, but you still had a solid piece here, came at a different angle, which is good...and your emotion really stood out here....because both had decent imagery...you took emotion though, and thats what pulled through.... v/DQ, good battle to both, keep up.
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06-13-05, 08:11 AM | #9 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 439B E775
Closed, Drama Queen wins
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