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Old 06-23-06, 10:44 AM   #1
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first off, both of your verses were good. they both stuck to the topic, which i thought was a well chosen one. some vocab around the piece, but that's alright cuz sometimes a piece sounds better when it is simple.

lucky luciano--great verse man. lots of nice rhyming. in some ways, it was kinda funny like at the end how "I FUCKIN HATE YOU BITCH.....but Yet i Still Love your Ass" which i thought was cool. flow was nice. it kept the piece together, and so did the structure. great job

black queen-- your verse was unique. i dont really like the style of rhyming with the same word on the next line...i think it feels a little monotonous...but that's just me. you did it here and there. structure was good, and so was flow.

overall both of you did a great job putting together this piece. 8/10
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