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Old 08-31-05, 04:09 PM   #1
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this turned out to be a nice lil collab.beat has a westcoast feel
me on the first verse...ivory on the hook...and him on the last vcerse


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Old 08-31-05, 05:36 PM   #2
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beats a lil slow for u. u sound better on fast beats. not bad tho. not a big fan of the beat personallys. who's big poppa anyways?

you've gotten alot better. good flow. unlike 99% of this site.
ivory.....the hook's garbage. But I do like the lazy style switched wit sum fast spit in there. stick to the verse's tho. no hooks for you. lol.

Jus peep my site an leave sum feed on my pieces on my message board. I reduce the beef on this site by posting to a minimum.
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Old 09-01-05, 06:02 AM   #3
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wassup wit ur vocals and everything low?


and u handled this slow beat well...would be better with more Bravado/Mic presence in ur delivery though...U used Big's style...so u gotta bring it down


yea the hook is pointless

Hooks need to be simple...and the only thing I remembered from that hook is CLAPPED UP

jus use repetitive lyrics in hooks...dats what make HOOKS catchy..REPETITION..chants almost


2nd cat has a nice flow as well


good track...cud be better with a more thought-out chorus though



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Old 09-01-05, 07:12 AM   #4
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Im likin ure flow, but I think you can be more confident in youre rhymes nah mean cos i checked ure other tracks, good track im likin the flw, delivery is kl, jus more confidence thas it....and also a more catchy hook wud be a lil better what Q sed but im feelin this...7.5/10
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Old 09-01-05, 03:23 PM   #5
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