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10-09-05, 05:32 PM | #1 | ||||
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One Regret
IP: 5285 DC82
One Regret
When we went our separate ways I said I would always be there when you needed but time has passed our thoughts and words became extinct I said I would always be there when you needed but when you came back to me, I had already moved on Our love was in the past But time has passed, I was promised to someone else I said we cannot be, the way it used to be Our thoughts and words became extinct the love we shared could not be reignited only one regret resides in me... I should have....... ...... never unplugged my microphone
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10-09-05, 05:34 PM | #2 | ||||
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10-09-05, 07:46 PM | #3 | |||
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Two Links, Pm Me The Second To Have This Re-Opend
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10-09-05, 08:53 PM | #4 | |||
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11-07-05, 09:08 PM | #5 | ||||
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any feed back please?
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11-08-05, 12:26 AM | #6 | ||||||
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this was good......i loved the unexpected twist at the end.
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11-13-05, 01:55 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: 91CC 50E1
lol yea i wasnt expecting that ending at all lol great piece nice twist props
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11-15-05, 12:09 PM | #9 | |||||||
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uhm damn not even a decent response...lol just messin..........dis was a good poem.....need to work on addin a few more vocab words in there....it was all basic.....structure was tight, rhyme scheme seemed to fit it....n i luved da endin....keep up da good work
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12-01-05, 10:33 PM | #10 | ||||
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IP: 9523 808A
yo. loved the poem ... i can relate. just dont under stand the last line............ but other wise good poem .. GK
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