Look stale ass cats fail to grasp my stats so I prevail
Fast wearing a hat and sharing that joy like Dan Quayle
Hound the streets like Dalmatians and speak with exaggeration
While the flags of nations fly, weak cats try tag my creation
And die, on the street I hide and try speak with pride
Only a freak would collide with crime not feel guilty and filthy inside
So I swiftly just ride by in my Lex and try to get sex
By using wet text in the form of love talk kind of vexed
Loud with aggression and proud of my profession rap crowds
Learn lessens from me so I’m having sessions in trapped clouds
Like angels, transport script by boat grabbed Listerine and stripped
Throats, now I’ve blessed the scene because your breath is clean lips
Still flapping ill is rapping graceful and very tasteful like lean hips
Groove sickly and move quickly up and down roads while my nouns
Load microphone go the code of Al capone shoot domes down
With machine guns having extreme fun as a gangster even Scarface
Knows at this bazaar pace I’ll end up a drug lord in a bar laced
With beers wearing a phony bandana with cats calling me Tony Montanna
Like a perky ocean I’m making jerky motion eating turkey in potion
Not even Thanksgiving and the banks giving me money on second notions

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Yesterday, 01:49 PM #2
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What is the meaning of this..im honestly confused...is there a point to this? or just rhyming words with words?
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Yesterday, 08:04 PM #3
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Mystic Chaos ARE YOU SAYING YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND THIS? ELF EXPLANOTORY i SAID A LOTS

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Yesterday, 09:55 PM #4
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MY LINK (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231842)
my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2797780)
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Yesterday, 10:14 PM #5
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i liked it no matter what these other people think

right about now, multis are overrated and the way this came was so much more natural to me than that.

you have a classic idealist viewpoint and i like it.

your style is basic but spiced up enough to pull interest.

this was relevent, brought me to the scene, and refreshing to me.

keep it up.

my only "constructive" criticism is to MAKE people feel. bring more imagery via concrete verbs. even when the characters/ideas/scenes are meant to be still keep things in a state of motion. otherwise, you did damn good.

dopeness

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Today, 06:58 AM #6
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Binary I thanks for the props for real