"one more time"

verses..
1st-d-mo
2nd-dukie
3rd-pp2
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chorus pp2 and dukie
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holla at cha boi!!!!! link in my sig songs at the top
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links
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233403
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233406

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yo man u should post ya link in ya thread....juss FYI.... but man not a bad club banger...beat is dope.......hook get's it done....

1st MC - got a choppy flow..........but it's on beat.......ya quality needs to be upped...but ya got a couple funny lines in there..

Hook- get's job done

2nd MC - got better flow than first........vocals need to be EQed...not bad feelin this verse more than the first...

Hook - see above

3rd MC - best on tha track...flow is strate...delivery is nice too.....only thing i can say is up quality but ya got the essentials down....

pz

~1~

*a betrayed metaphore*

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uppin for a lil more comments before i post my next song

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listening through my audio technica ATH M40fs

the beat's ok, defnot bad. the hook would prolly be better if the mic weern't ass or at least EQ'd. The first verse started okay and took a turn south into straight wack imo, basic rhymescheme mad uninspired lyrics at that. Flow was was consistent for the most part but got lumpy and rushed and stretched in certian parts. Second verse the vol gets low on one part of the verse, then mad loud on another part, but the second verse was better than the first for shizz. third verse was along the lines of the first. skit at the end was a nice touch, shoulda faded it out instead of just cuttin it off.

real talk cuz that's all i know.

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*used 2 big rmx*

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i liked this alot better than snap your fingers.. .verses are pretty good... i like the hook the best.. you just gotta work on your quality learn some mixing tricks.. or shit record at my hosue.. muahaha... either was shit was aight... pce up

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southbeachmiamiho