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Old 11-23-07, 09:53 PM   #16
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Old 11-24-07, 08:44 AM   #17
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man...get at me for that collab


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I do like shadowville beats...but, they tend to be loud-ish


U sound like Ebircs when u first came in...

I think ur flow is adequate here...but, up ur delivery...hold out the syllables a tad longer...

I like ur dubs

hook cudda been mixed better: a tad louder, maybe panned differently...


not bad for what it was...but, cud def. use a lil polish




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Old 11-24-07, 03:54 PM   #18
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Thanks man.

And I will definitely get at you on that collab.
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Old 11-24-07, 10:45 PM   #19
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You gotta work on your lyrics bro...

I think youd benefit from working on beats with a faster tempo... As it stands, some people have the voice for those slow bpm instrumentals and some people just sound fucked...

Lyrics though for you is a biggie.............some of those lines were weak as hell my friend... What I suggest.........is you sit there and write a 100 bar track and try to elevate with your multies and flow...

Not trying to be rude.......just trying to help you improve.....
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Old 11-25-07, 05:53 PM   #20
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hey, where you livin now? i'm still in the windy city (lethbridge, the real windy city) for another semester anyways.

I like this song man...quality is really good...i like your voice on faster songs, i'd like the flow a lot but it comes a little short...like you the pauses aren't distinguished because of your rhyme scheme. I'm really liking this though the more i listen. Voice is good...presence is upped, but delivery is still a tad less then what you could do though.
We still have to meet up and collab

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Old 11-26-07, 02:36 PM   #21
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You gotta work on your lyrics bro...

I think youd benefit from working on beats with a faster tempo... As it stands, some people have the voice for those slow bpm instrumentals and some people just sound fucked...

Lyrics though for you is a biggie.............some of those lines were weak as hell my friend... What I suggest.........is you sit there and write a 100 bar track and try to elevate with your multies and flow...

Not trying to be rude.......just trying to help you improve.....


For sure, man, I feel you.

Thanks for the advice.

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hey, where you livin now? i'm still in the windy city (lethbridge, the real windy city) for another semester anyways.

I like this song man...quality is really good...i like your voice on faster songs, i'd like the flow a lot but it comes a little short...like you the pauses aren't distinguished because of your rhyme scheme. I'm really liking this though the more i listen. Voice is good...presence is upped, but delivery is still a tad less then what you could do though.
We still have to meet up and collab

www.myspace.com/neighborj
message me what you think of the new rough cuts if you have a minute.
peace


I'm back in my home town by Edmonton. How is your schooling going?

And fuck yeah we have to collab.

Thanks for the feed man, I'll hit up your thread.
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Old 11-26-07, 03:26 PM   #22
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yea...only thing i have to say is watch out with the way your sayin things....toward the end starts to take a monotone vibe to it....nyg n phenom got it right tho....clean up a few things smooth it out....n swtich some shit up, n your good to go
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I will be re-recording this soon, so I will post it up when the whole song is done.
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