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Old 04-23-03, 12:55 AM   #16
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below me says:
Klavin White
David Harding
below me says:
recognize those names?
"in case you dont remember me i'll take your mind fo a lap around the blocc to jogg ya m3mory" says:
david harding
"in case you dont remember me i'll take your mind fo a lap around the blocc to jogg ya m3mory" says:
not the other tho

Interesting...

Im out... peace.. ummm.. pussy
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Old 04-23-03, 01:01 AM   #17
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yea.....i don't get what u just said but whateva goodnight sleep tight..........
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Old 04-23-03, 03:25 AM   #18
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^^^haha, Beef, yo shit was pretty funny, in a lyrical sense, the hook was wack but the verses were aiight fo a diss... Hit ma shit up...

Peace Out Yo!!!!
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Old 04-23-03, 02:25 PM   #19
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Thanks its not really beef as much as boredem but if he spits something back then i guess it is but not really just wastin' time yo i hit ya shit back up man........
Still uppin...will return the favor...........
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Old 04-23-03, 04:36 PM   #20
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listenin.....

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like the beat...lyrics was straight, flow was ok...got better as u went on some punches was kinda weak....like ya flow ...hook played alot, flipped some tight lines tho fa sho....i think maybe u jus was strugglin to put the lines n the beat but if it was more memoried uda had it down....one of the better audios i've heard lately tho,


keep spittin ....beat was tight i like that typea shit
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Old 04-23-03, 04:42 PM   #21
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Thanks for the feedback.much appreciated.......uppin........drop links return favor.........
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Old 04-23-03, 07:09 PM   #22
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Re: listenin.....

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one of the better audios i've heard lately tho,

Not saying this was horrible, cuz the lyrics were sti8..
but wtf have you been listening too?
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Old 04-23-03, 07:18 PM   #23
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iiiight...man you critique tell me what you think as if it wasn't a diss towards you but just a normal track you listenin' to honest ans seriously put down what you think and that can help me elevate ya know............
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Old 04-23-03, 07:28 PM   #24
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Beat = pretty ill.. You started spitting at a random spot on the
beat, you need to drop at the begining of the sample.
Flow was weak in my opinion, it took away from you lyrics ALOT.
Lyrics were 1/3 ILL... 1/3 MEDIOCRE... 1/3 RANDOMLY WACK.
Hook was extremely gay, and some of the points you made
were retarded. Quality obviously sucked, but I think you said
something about broken mic or something.

"Im so concise on a dyke" <<what?

The way you used my location, and the surroundings around me
was ill!!! I never would have expected 'sutter creek' and 'clinton
road' in a diss against me. Props on that...

Im tired so Im about done.. But I will respond

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Old 04-23-03, 07:29 PM   #25
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Lyrics = your definate strong point.. work on structure though..

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Old 04-23-03, 07:41 PM   #26
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Thanks............i'll look forward to your response..........
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Old 04-24-03, 08:08 PM   #27
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My critique is what concise posted. really work on that.
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