My flos is da opposite of SHIT, u can call me AN-TI-SEP-TIC
My lyrics got these bithces shakin like they EP-I-LEP-TIC
Im BRUTAL and RUTHLESS, comparible to GENGUS KHAN
And plus, Im leavin u lookin bloodier than a USED TAMPON
You made plans to try n come to my hood, to Demolish me
Instead u filled wit bulletholes, layin up in tha INFIRMERY
Now ur a STATISTIC, while im still SICK, ILL, and SADISTIC
Comin at me? please dog, is it really worth it to risk it?
Im even ILL enuff to fuckin battle you ALGEBRAICALLY
ME + GAT = DEATH, now do i have to say it blatently?
But Lately see, i decided to go n join a new AFFILIATION
ILLogical Lyricist, cuttin bitches up like AMPUTATIONS
Think u got talent, well watever u bring, then i can triple
Not BANGIN, but still leave u covered in BLOOD or as a CRIPple
Im like a SuperHuman, Bio-Genetically manufactured
I'll be Leavin ur bones BROKEN, or severely FRACTURED
I'm torturous, Forcin u to chew up sum glass involuntarily
Think thats bad? well that plans only my SECONDARY!
A True G dont spoil his plan, thats SABOTAGE OF CONQUEST
Fuck SICK and ILL homie, my rhymes is str8 INFECTOUS
You couldnt have FRESH rhymes if they scented wit PIN-SOL
Your rhymes is washed up, like they r in bottles of CLAROL
I Scare-All, wit rhymes like these, cuz they deadly and vicious
I'll deprive u the TASTE of victory, cuz im MALNUTRICIOUS
But your delicious, and im EATIN U UP, so jus go ahead n quit
You could ghostwrite for my ASS, n still not "WRITE FOR SHIT"
So as youve seen, im ILL, but ur very easily RELINQUISHED
My rhymes FOREVER HOT, like a fire that u cant EXTINGUISH

and im out... feedback people

lmao...looks like a battle verse.
it wasnt bad. im not into the
gangsta type thing. but it had
some nice punches in there.
i mean. flow was ok..nothing
to special to quote. do your
thing. not too bad of a piece here.

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i wrote this a while back yo, but, thanks for tha feedback...

go peep some other peoples things...
like mine

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im gonna peep others, but i always post my shit first...

it was aight...

i didnt like how you seperated the words to point out your multies... putting a word into syllabols isn't gonna help the multi... just make it look messy and fucked up

err...Whats with topics like this for text? Kinda...errr dumb...

ahhaha,yer dun i aint into the gangsta shit,never have,never will...you need to expand your horizons,hip hop is where th elevation and shit is...thats wha tyou need to do...elevate...and drop the gangsta shit....itll do you good..

i write other shit, this is for an Audio, but watever thanks for the feedback, im kinda hopin for feedback dealing wit how i did on THIS topic... but its str8...

shit was tight keep spittin

thanks yo, more feedback please...

This was an aight piece , , ,but none of tha lines had my attention because they were kinda simple