^good lookin........ everyday was just a verse for a reason..... its a snippet......... gangsta that was a freestyle..... =]

I cant explain why but your style is sort of unique. You road the beat nicely and lyrics were on point. Mic presense might need a lil work. Pretty nice track on a net level, it was worth the listen.

Cise

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lmao... and I won't comment...

but I will say...


You gotta be 15-17...

if you are younger than that... good job...



If you are older than that... never talk shit about anyone's audio...


and if you are in that bracket... lol... I'm out...

^wtf??? sound like a hata... im guessing you aint got no audio...... stupid textcee's hahaha..... funny how every otha nigga on 3DIFFERENT SITES.... feelin my shit.. but this wank gotta say some stupid shit..... can you even say ONE LINE I SAID?? you didnt even listen to my shit....... fukin wank... wat eva....... HATA
dont bring your garbage in my threads. plz....
and im 17 nigga

yall know im ill

said you gotta be 15-17... www.soundclick.com/avalonproductions yea... I'm all text dog...













If I don't like it... I don't like it... that don't mean that I'm hatin...
-Common...

i like the beat, it cool

u sound nice on this, nice delivery

nice lyrics,

nice drop
7/10

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You want a critique..? You got it...


Everyday...


turn your vocals up slightly...
intro... was to long... slightly boring...
your voice is annoying...
an average day in my hood song is played... has been for about 9 years...
lyrics blah...
rhyme scheme good...
punches... none... and I don't mean battle punches... I mean punches as in something to make me say OOOooh... nice... NONE...
beat was ok... not great...




Smoken My life Away...

Yet again... Songs content is blah... these songs went out 9 years ago...
Vocals alot better...
whoever's first... probably Yung... good flow... rhyme scheme... eh...
2nd: flow slightly better than everyday... still choppy... rhyme sheme is eh... yet once again...
nothing but you're dumb ass comments made me keep listening... Make a song someone will want to listen to...


Gangsta that...


The Opening wasn't hot at all...
content was kinda ok still played...
wordplay was played...
although not that bad... best joint from you hands down...
flow was alot better...
Punches alot better...
Best beat you picked so far...
but the whole... "yall gangstas right..? I'm the hardest gangsta and this is why" shit is played...
No one who I know that listened believes you... but get ya start
that laugh and what not at 2:10 isn't hot... could've ended it alot better...


All in all 1 out of 3 songs was ok... 4-10...


once again...

If I don't like it... I don't like it... That don't mean that I'm hatin...
-Common


Look at that... see what you want to work on... I'm not gonna hold ya fuckin hand... that wasn't only a critique... it was my opinion... so If you're gonna be in the game... grow some nuts...



Av...

^ i really didnt take into account anything you just said..... most of it was stupid...... but ok... and gangsta that was a freestyle..... and no one asked you to belive my lifestyle....... everything is played to you....... lol at your comments "no one will listen" when PEOPLE SEEM TO BE LISTENING..... well dont matta you just one person against 100's sooooooooooooo yea. keep your opinions....... your wack anyway..... and thats truth..... and do you know anything about rap structure??? u said no punches...... i should punch you.

Post Man - Your not THAT nice dawg. Your shit is slightly above the net average, SLIGHTLY. Your too cocky, if someone gives you their opinion and you just shoot it down and tell them they hatin, and you "dont take into account" anything the person tells you, you will get no where.

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^ you dont know what i take into account...... when i get someones honest opinion and crituqe. i take into account... and im no where near cocky....... i get help with my shit from people far beyond mine or your level all the time........ but he didnt say shit that would help me........

1.My voice is annoying - WTF AM I GOING TO TAKE INTO ACCOUNT WITH THIS ONE???

2.All my topics are played out - Ok so i guess im not supposed to rap about REAL life and what i see... let me rap about big chains and bein in the club... that seems to be in now a days....

3.Your laid back track had no "ppunches" - ITS A LAID BACK TRACK ABOUT EVERYDAY LIVING.... WHERE IM FROM...... MAYBE ITS NOT IN YOUR SUBERBIA.....

^now if you think these were valid suggestions.. THEN YOUR AN IDIOT RIGHT ALONG WITH HIM... NUFF SAID.

lmao, there comes a time in every MC's Life where you just gotta lay back, grab the mic, light it up, and just go nutz.

I'm really feelin this track, it was short, but I can tell you just wanted to fuck around on a track. did you make this beat? pretty nice. ridin the beat real nice, qualities nice, I like how you play with the pronunciation of words, pretty tight.

I love you

goodnight, sir