The first time your demon hand smashed against my fragile cheek,
Breathing crimson into the paleness of my soul,
Ten thousand needles slowly plucking at my torn and ticking heart,
The only time that i refused and uttered 'No'.
Chained to the belief that situations would improve,
You apologised and like a fool i took you back,
A toy used for your pleasure, and sadly, nothing more,
Would you have treat me differently if i was black?
You think that us women should indeed be seen, not heard,
Never bothering to speak up for our rights,
Well here is one proud female who's gonna give her word,
I will not be reduced to tears by you tonight.
I'm going to make you listen, even if you cut me till i bleed,
Even if your hand thrashes my face once more,
I will not give in to your unnecessary violence,
I will stand tall after you throw me on the floor.
I will rise from every insult, free myself from every beating,
Walk out and leave YOU crying on the floor,
Truth is i don't need you for shit, but you need me,
Even if you wanted sex and nothing more!
Straight down to the police station, report this incident,
Show the bruises that i gained from my decline,
Smiling all the while, as the lock you in a cell,
I don't love you, and I'm pleased to say, I'm doing fine.

Wow. this was mad good.. most women can't walk away from getting beat like that... but you wrote a poem about it and depicted it nicely. The emotion was there, and it all fit together nicely.. nice vocabulary, everything really did fit together perfectly. Nice job..

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Liba dee your pieces are still coming strong and full of emotion. This piece i adore because its simply put but has such a big effect!
i like how you compared how you felt when he first started beating you, to how you felt at the end when he beat you. and i even more enjoyed the fact that the bastard was put behind bars at the end. you did a good job showing emoitons, actions, and thoughts throu this piece, and it was a very good read. the structure was good, and nothing wrong with the vocab or flow. check you later!!!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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thanks filed, i can always count on you for supportive feed, and twisted, i appriciate the feed, you always reply to my posts and i can rely on you. I have much respect for both of you.

Wow Liba. This is one of ur greatest. You had a lot of emotion in this and I can say that I can relate to everything you wrote. I can tell that it all came from your heart. Just gotta say keep your head up. I dont think that there was anything wrong with this. Great piece. Most respect.

^agreed, this is one of your better pieces i've read and i liked how clearly you portrayed your emotions, good job, 1luv.

This is what I like to see. It was deep and showed me that your done and stood up for yourself. Not just some toy some1 can play with and then leave when done. From the start I've had mad love for you and your talent. Mad respect from my heart hun. Respect JT

Jt i think i love you, lol, pm me darling. And thanks every1 for supporting me, i appriciate y'all.