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05-07-03, 06:18 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Check out(first rap ever)
IP: 7123 2C13
tell me what you think please!!!! its my first actually kinda ryhming rap so yea give me some credit.
eh you check it/ im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/ im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/ for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/ with this bullshit ya'll spittin/ take a close look at what ive written/ burn your eyez then make you take a shit n/ remember what you saw written/ some ask me why it took so long for me come ..well im here i came/ the names Easy M N/ im just givin ya'll what youve been cravin/ this rap shit im savin make a spot for me to etch my name in/ peace.... |
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05-07-03, 06:18 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 7123 2C13
feedback please
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05-07-03, 06:31 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 5153 3B92
loved the openign lol
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05-07-03, 06:36 PM | #4 | |||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
er ah............that wasnt that good. Just work on your vocab and I'm sure you'll do better.
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05-07-03, 07:02 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 088B CFC3
I Like that first rhyme also, but besides that, it needs work. No better than i can do though.
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05-07-03, 07:06 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 7FEB 4053
jus ya first post.....it was aight i guess.....r u white?......no hate jus yo styles off a lil bit......cant do nothin bout that though.....up yo vocab and you need to play wit ya words......
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05-07-03, 09:18 PM | #7 | |||||||
BANNED for biting
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IP: FF98 53B8
im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/
im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/ for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/ ^^^^Illest lines , , ,, but tha rest were whack |
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05-07-03, 10:03 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 7123 2C13
alright ill work on it i got one posted in imfumuz tryouts so go check that one out otherwise if i get to it ill post it here(much better)
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05-07-03, 10:13 PM | #9 | |||||||
wanna be sek-c
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IP: FBDA F7FB
IT WAS OK.
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06-17-03, 07:43 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
it was prolly better than i would but it could use some work, keep playinw/ stuff aight............................................. .................................................. ..................
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06-17-03, 07:56 PM | #11 | |||||||
BANNED For Being A Dick
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IP: E267 1347
YUK
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06-17-03, 11:13 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: B694 D469
im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/
im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/ for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/ hahahaha nearly spat out my breakfast, funny lines my man but nah listen to the experienced ones, dun worry bout poeple sayin it sucked ass just up ur vocab n keep postin ur shit, first lines showed u got sumthin there to use tucked away, keep goin man |
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