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Old 05-31-05, 02:43 AM   #1
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Old 05-31-05, 08:52 AM   #2
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Checking in.....

Any ideas SP?
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Old 06-01-05, 12:03 AM   #3
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check...

no im sorry but no i deas
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Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


Quote:
Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 06-01-05, 11:35 AM   #4
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Topic: Unknown Destination

Ok?
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50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-01-05, 09:27 PM   #5
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ok....................
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


Quote:
Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 06-03-05, 01:52 AM   #6
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Socrates philosophies were Mockeries..we wrote the shit
wrenched away knowlege from Egyptians and Ethiopians-
ill debate with any one if they thinkin different they Smokin Opium
-Egypt was the first civilized group of people known to Mankind
while others were stuck in caves in a primal State of Mind
They say the Accuser of the brethen is really guilty of the Accustaion
They say"these niggers r taking over"with motives drove by Domination
Dictatorship in its greatest formality-
Think about it to try to kill a whole nation of people was evil-where was there Morality
and like Kitty litter when Society Shits-The Goverment just Covers it Up
what the fuck is up
Media got these white folks locking there door when i walk
by thinking IM gonna fuck them Up-
But things get deeper..price of life gets cheaper
payin black rappersto shorten each others trip to the grimreaper
Rappers aint wordsmiths no more there actors slash swordssmiths
Except Semi automatics took the place of medialval warfare
so now they draw the 5th- n cut each others life to bits
those r the examples they want for us and shit
Go and kill ya fellow brother in the struggle-look at Ja Rule and 50 cent
-Shit is evident-oh yeah please people get a grip
The Residence of Presidency is Called the White House
SO how we gonna have a Black President-
Its all biased propaganda -They bite our Slang
but behind our back degrade our name-Keep that as a Memoranda-
I do belive its a cure 4 Aids and Cancer-
Those man made diseases design to hinder me
as BLack Man and Other Minorites-for over 400 hundred centuries
we as people been tore down physically and emotionally-
so its time that we open our minds and heart so ur Soul can Breath...
do it today because hesitation will only have u
walking blind to our unknown destination
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


Quote:
Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 06-03-05, 09:44 PM   #7
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I'm showin. Just startin now..
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Originally Posted by Twisted Visions
50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-03-05, 10:25 PM   #8
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Unknown Destination

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*breathes in. breathes out*

Day Before
Been training my whole life for this, time's finally here!
People say I should miss me family but I shed no tear.
I mean, I barely see them anyway, what will a few years make?
They say I should be back in 25 years, yet I still shake.
My hand quivers and my arms rise like magnets to the ceiling,
I can't believe a little trip is giving me this feeling.
I pace back and forth like I'm caged inside this room,
The doors only open so that I can walk into my tomb.
They say my body will be fine, and soon I can be released,
And that when I return in my honor they will hold a feast!
I go to sleep, late around 8 (AM) like the months leading to this,
As I lie awake I wonder if I really want to do this.
So many things can go wrong, I've heard them say,
If a laser miscalculates then I could be in the sun the next day!
But if all goes well, mankind will finally accomplish their dream,
We will be able to stop in the current of the flowing time stream!

The Day (read slower)
I'm, amazingly calm like I'm in the eye of the storm,
Usually I have chills, but today the crowds are keeping me warm.
Torn sides have finally merged and I know I can do this,
I take my wife and children and whisper 'Let me give you a kiss"
I kiss them all and wave goodbye to the society that gave me,
An oppertunity to be in space and feel for once, Godly.
I strap into my seat and take one final view of my home,
For no matter where I roam, earth will be here, this I know.
The rockets start shooting flames and some people are crying,
I look out at young people gossiping and old people dying.
(faster)
Suddenly, the world is a blur and this pressure is so high,
I couldn't lift a paperclip, no, not even a finger if I tried!
Then, just as it had started, the immense pressure released,
(slower)
I looked out my window, and witnessed the definition of peace.

In Space
It's been 20 years since the day I left the world I called home,
I no longer remember grass, the sky, just the metal of this dome.
I've aged about 6 years and I look out into the blanket of black,
Wondering where the laser is that will eventually take me back.
Without warning a red beam shines into my eyes,
I am blinded by this light but will not close them to my surprise.
Then my ship STOPS, and starts to swing back around,
However I only see black and hear my breathing as the only sound.
I move my hands frantically, but still I see but blurs,
Oh my god, I am blind, in my mind for what suddenly occured.

Destination?
Words escaped me and I realized that I had caused my fate,
I wanted to go back so bad, that I just couldn't wait.
Even if they remember me, what good is going back the earth?
Knowing I will never see my wife or children, but that isn't my hurt.
My pain is that I have to steer my way and now I have to rely,
On my heart and good sense, or I will surely die.
For 19 years I have been flying and so far I think I am doing well,
Of course, not being able to see but still I think I can tell.
I hear a clock chiime 8 times, and my heart starts to race,
If the math is correct then I should be at the right place.
My heart is beating so fast I think they can hear it in space,
Even if I can't see them I can't wait to go and touch their face.
Then the clock chime 8 again, and again, and again,
How long has it been chiming that number, and when...
Will I get home to hear people's chears,
To hear their laughter, surprise, and feel their tears?
I see a bright light and then it passes by me,
What could penetrate blindess so freely?
The sun, I've passed it, and my world is behind me, and without my vision,
I realize that now my new home will forever be, my unknown destination.
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50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-03-05, 10:26 PM   #9
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Sorry for it being so long, but once I started I couldn't stop.
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50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-03-05, 10:45 PM   #10
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bu if u go over he limi aren u disqualfide....
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


Quote:
Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 06-03-05, 10:49 PM   #11
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Oh crap........
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50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
Seangunner@gmail.com
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-03-05, 10:49 PM   #12
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but if u go over the limit arent u disqualifide...................................... ....................
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


Quote:
Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
 
Old 06-03-05, 11:04 PM   #13
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check the rules man there is no limit :thumbsup:
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Old 06-03-05, 11:20 PM   #14
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You serious?

*checks rules*

Wo, when did that change?
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50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.
 
Old 06-04-05, 12:36 AM   #15
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Well, definitely gotta give this to Revelation...dope ass verse...one of, if not the most creative I've ever seen.

Spoken: your verse was good. It had good imagery an interesting twist and solid vocab. Your structure made it hard to read at times, but it was still o.k. It wasn't a bad drop by any means, you just got outshined this time.

Rev: What can be said??? Great drop. Excellent twist. The plot mad the whole drop suspenseful and easy to read. Structure was great, imagery was great, and emotion was great. I' must say I think this piece was flawless.

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