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03-09-07, 12:59 AM | #1 | ||||||
Power Hungry
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C.R.E.A.M. ft Triple N
IP: 2143 04F1
Off the aim 4 da top mixtape!
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4845512 Myself then Trip. lets get some decent feedback here
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03-09-07, 02:04 AM | #2 | |||
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IP: C248 9E60
ok well i like wu tangs song so yall better come hard on this
beat sounds a little low..not too bad. zone comes in cool so far..flow suits this well..doesnt get too boring..hahaha @ mention of pitbull's jeans. lyrically its pretty good..nothing too spectacular.. hook could use some adlibs or something triples vocals sounds a lot better than yours..hahaha difference in quality is kinda strange. like the flow on this..by stander line was kinda weird...didnt really like it too much. nothing too special that really stuck out in this verse. this was an okay track..hook jus seemed a little empty..lyrically zone was a little better but triple's verse was a little more entertaining with the switch ups and stuff.. |
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03-09-07, 03:26 AM | #3 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 7DC8 5E09
for some reason this track wont play on my comp i tried to click the link like 4 times
but if its anything like the wu C.R.E.A.M. i probably gonna like it unless the lyrics suck PEACE |
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03-09-07, 10:36 AM | #4 | |||
Addicted
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IP: 1BB7 664C
zone ur flow is coo its simple but it works for the track....lyrics was coo as well i like the hook lol.....method man is coo.....triple i like how you put reverb in ur verse flow is gud...delviery is there gud shit homie...overall this wass coo
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03-20-07, 01:48 AM | #5 | |||||||
Broke as hell
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IP: 53B1 A5EC
yea..clan beat..nice pick
first person came hot nice....good delivery and good wordplay....you sound nice on this yo. second cat came real nice...hot....i like the way you begun your verse...yall on some real grimey early 90s shit.....good shit yall....keep droppin
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03-20-07, 10:16 AM | #6 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 6A91 ECBF
I heard this like a LONG time ago....it's cool...
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03-20-07, 01:24 PM | #7 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: F899 77E5
Zone Out - Flow was a little on the simple side but you had a good delivery. Quality could be upped a bit but other than that is was decent. The hook is str8.
Triple N - very good quality, the flow was good had some good switch ups in the verse. Delivery was crisp. Good shyt.. Overall.. Zone Out if your quality matched his then this would been hot. I'll be on the look out though. One up |
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03-20-07, 09:13 PM | #8 | ||||||
Power Hungry
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IP: 2143 04F1
what exactly do yall mean when yall say the flow is simple?
I wasntusing 1 syllable rhyming. Matter fact, I was rhymin entire bars "just keep ya mind right, ready and on top and keep ya grind tight, steady and on blocks"
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03-20-07, 09:23 PM | #9 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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Aight, the problem for me right off the bat is that this is a track that's considered classic to me. It just ain't working with a remix especially since I've heard remixes to this that are off the chain for real.
Now, with that out of the way.... Zone, your delivery on this seemed all over the place to me. Your lyrics were nice and it flowed well, but without the delivery it just seemed all jumbled. No hate man, just how I felt about it... Trip came a little better in my eyes cause his delivery caught the ear. His style commands the listener. Lyrics and flow were there like usual.... Overall, I thought it was a good track, but not the best I've heard from either of you. Not really something I'd bump over and over, but it was cool for a listen
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03-20-07, 09:53 PM | #10 | ||||||
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^^That is predictable, whether one-syllable rhyming or not. I actually thought that flow worked pretty decent on this track. I was feeling most everything bout your verse except the delivery and presence, the lyrics were okay. Seems like you just faded out in some parts then came back. Last time I heard you, you were more confident on the mic. I say re-record it again, now that you might know it like the back of your hand. And fix those minor things. And in comes Trip, I like your delivery on this track more than other ones as well as your flow except in one spot towards the end of your verse it seemed like too much space, i think it was after the wheel chair line. The line I don't like is the bye stander one... Like it was stretching it. Everything else seemed fine. Not bad fellas... 1
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03-20-07, 10:57 PM | #11 | ||||||
Power Hungry
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IP: 2143 04F1
thanks for all the feedback
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