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09-07-03, 03:52 PM
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Life Goes On(My Version) Need Replies...
IP: B47A 7630
Im Writing A Serious Song, And I Want My Girlfriend To Hear It...
We Just Broke Up After 17 Months, But I Know This Is A Huge Mistake.... I Need A Co-Writer, And Im Looking For An Audio Head To Help Me Out On Recording It, Like Have THem Record It, Cuz I Cant I Dont Have Any Programs....Please Help if You Can...I Have One Verse So Far....Tell Me What To Edit And Stuff..Thanks....All Help Is Really Appreciated... This Also Goes To Tupacs Beat "Life Goes On" I Still Remember The Way You Looked At Me Saw The Love In Yo Eyes, Like You Was Feelin Me Love Aint Easy, But To Go On, You Just Gotta Believe Baby, We Were So Close, I Could Feel Both Our Hearts Beat You Brought Me Down, On My Knees, Just One Request, Please Just Open Yo Eyes And See My Heart Is Locked And You Hold The Key Im Still Standin, But Soon I Will Need Yo Shoulder Cuz My Nights Are Getting Colder And Colder With Our Age, We Are Getting Older And Older I Have No Courage W/O You, I Need To Be Boulder And Boulder We Spent So Many Nights Fallin Asleep On The Phone I Dont Wanna Be Alone, Stuck Lookin At Yo Back, Yo Gone ** Replies....Please.... |
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09-07-03, 05:00 PM
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IP: E772 2D41
well its simple,u need alot more vocab,structure is good,i would say u need more creativity but on a played out topic u cant be very creative,although it lacks some things,the emotion is there and thats what counts.keep elevatin kid.~1~
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09-07-03, 05:07 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
Thank you....This is just a rough Sketch of my Song....
Thats why i need a Co-writer.... TO help out.... And i need an Audio Head to record for me...... Thank you |
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09-08-03, 06:20 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
UP
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09-08-03, 07:18 PM
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..Soft Focus..
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IP: 4DE3 E3F2
iight man...i like ho its personal so you should be able to make something hot out of it...but dont try to go so hot..make it simple for her to understand...an really apreciate..for your first verse it was okie..but ive seen your work an you can complee something more valuble for her juz stay focused man...an take care..peace
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09-08-03, 07:40 PM
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Re: Life Goes On(My Version) Need Replies...
IP: 87B0 7F3F
Quote:
You are a freaking girl!
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09-08-03, 08:27 PM
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-Real Time-
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IP: FDD6 AE15
^Word., an Ugly Ass Dyke!
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09-08-03, 08:47 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
^^ sorry....I meant to say.....My friend asked me to write a song for his girlfriend and their situation......
I just need another co-writer |
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09-08-03, 08:49 PM
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IP: 87B0 7F3F
F U, Sir Eel. . Slik is hot!
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09-08-03, 08:55 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
^^ Man just shut up.....
Im just lookin for some help and replies on this peice.... |
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09-08-03, 11:59 PM
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IP: 46B7 07B6
i might collab with you on this,but this didn't seem like tha usual solid shit u be spittin,yo hit my new song up with some feed please.You lawyas give detailed critique.
Peace |
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09-09-03, 05:38 PM
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IP: B47A 7630
^^ Word will do..........................
This was just a rough sketch..........................and theni m ognna edit |
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