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08-03-04, 01:25 PM
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Surreal
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The minds a book, keep it closed you learn nothing/ you ain't real, open it up then you start fronting/ talking 'bout knowledge, the good and the bad/ what was taken from you was something you never had/ fighting for boundries, a city that ain't yours/ now you got young ones lying dead on the floor/ all due to gang violence, the knuckleheads run the street/ wondering why I have my loved one lying dead at my feet/ restriction is fact never fiction, caugt in the condition of living life as tradition/ in suspicion, it's like Christs' persecution/ mental shakles keeps us moving in slow motion/ aggrivated cuz people were hated/ demonstrated now re-created by the educated/ verbally violated, now mentally stagnated/ people wanna move on but don't have the balls to say it/ a closed mouth don't get fed, our people will end up dead/ all because you wanted to bang for the blue or the red/ instead let's live life like we're the last generation/ cuz in fact, in reality, we're all God's creations!
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08-03-04, 01:27 PM
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[QUOTE=Done]The minds a book, keep it closed you learn nothing/ you ain't real, open it up then you start fronting/ talking 'bout knowledge, the good and the bad/ what was taken from you was something you never had/ fighting for boundries, a city that ain't yours/ now you got young ones lying dead on the floor/ all due to gang violence, the knuckleheads run the street/ wondering why I have my loved one lying dead at my feet/ restriction is fact never fiction, caugt in the condition of living life as tradition/ in suspicion, it's like Christs' persecution/ mental shakles keeps us moving in slow motion/ aggrivated cuz people were hated/ demonstrated now re-created by the educated/ verbally violated, now mentally stagnated/ people wanna move on but don't have the balls to say it/ a closed mouth don't get fed, our people will end up dead/ all because you wanted to bang for the blue or the red/ instead let's live life like we're the last generation/ cuz in fact, in reality, we're all God's creations!
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08-03-04, 01:28 PM
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Battle back and get attached!
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08-03-04, 02:22 PM
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IP:
Dat was aite man nutin special bu no a nightmare na meen.
U got talent cuz bu dont rap about thangs u dont kno about bcuz datl get u fuked Holla at ya boy One's Mind NovA |
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08-04-04, 04:51 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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*cough* wack structure was fucked *cough*
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08-04-04, 04:52 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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^^^^speaks tha truth*^* (_!_)
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08-04-04, 05:02 AM
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<<NaMe ReTiReD>>
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^^haha..lol..you ever got anything nice ta say??? yo,jus fix ya structure n get some wordplay happening in that verse...
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08-04-04, 06:07 AM
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fer real man... i've never seen virtue give some positive feedback or constructive criticism. just hate.
anyways, i thought it was alright, nice ideas and images. just try to think up a more clear and consistent structure and get that mindgrain working to pit some more witty lines in there. peace!
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08-06-04, 12:53 PM
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I feel all ya...I spit the truth Virtue. I been through some shit homie. I see whatcha mean though. Like Jadakiss asked..."Why do rappers lie in 85% of their rhymes?" I don't homie, I can vouch for everything I spit and so can the folks that have been down for me.
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