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01-18-04, 12:24 AM | #1 | |||||||
SaRe 2
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Stupid shit
IP: 6DC6 5676
im tired of stipid ass shit
the only way i kan react to this shit is when i spit and lets face it yall shit is gay and mine is betta i dun spit i spray ya rhymes give you tooth decae cant even hold your teeth together my rhymes cut so deep theyll have to sew you back together with platnum or leather when im mad mean ill keep my laces clean so its the 1st time there dirty when kick in your spleen you gona need a physician for your stupiid ass decisions to go in your brain and find out what your missin my ass is what your kissin im on fire like nitro glicerine and your what im dissin your mom is who im kissin your mouth is where im pissin when im done im gona spit in it sorry for whoeva kissin it
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I leave you in the same haze that you in afta ya blaze dun worry i aint done this ish just begun im out o1ne aight yo help me out with this SaRe 2 V.s. Fuck up |
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01-18-04, 12:28 AM | #2 | |||||||
tHa OnE FeMaLe*
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IP: 8B9D F815
mad nice keep elevatin and you'll be relli good =]
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Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe |
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01-18-04, 12:30 AM | #3 | |||||||
SaRe 2
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IP: 6DC6 5676
Thanks for the feed... stay true
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I leave you in the same haze that you in afta ya blaze dun worry i aint done this ish just begun im out o1ne aight yo help me out with this SaRe 2 V.s. Fuck up |
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01-18-04, 02:07 AM | #4 | ||||
Word.
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IP: DD10 0DFF
This was alright....probably could have used a better structure in this though, but it was ok, just try keeping your lines around the same length, probably could have made some of your lines a little longer but its was alright....you had some alright flow in this....vocab was alright it could be up'd though i think....also try adding some multies to this to make it better...but keep at it.
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