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10-16-05, 10:19 PM | #1 | |||||
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Bruises mark my arms
scars cover my body all are held high remarkably. Its ok if you don’t understand because unless you’ve been there you wouldn’t understand I’m a warrior with only one thing written in my plan Got all kinds of weapons that fit in my hands Got restraints and armour, but all this is nothing compared to the rewards He has in store. So tell me know it all’s who’s got the better sword? -from the day I was born in the Family I fell into my role as a fighter thorough and mentally physically, knowing no pain or woe. I know my craft of fighting well I’ll out last you and watch up high as you burn in Hell. Warrior for Jesus, all the way, bleed, bruise for God ~Hoo-rah~ I’ll help you out, find your way, for a warrior of God isn’t afraid of the next day so have your say, your 15 minutes of fame, while us soldiers sit here and try to explain to the people hungry ,needed, and poor, of information of what God has in store. Fight with a sword, talented with both, metal and God’s word, not one to boast. But if you ever wanna challenge your belief’s against mine I won’t back down from a challenge, I’ll speak my mind. Time is precious, words are few, actions are words this is through. -from the day I was born in the Family I fell into my role as a fighter thorough and mentally physically, knowing no pain or woe. I know my craft of fighting well I’ll out last you and watch up high as you burn in Hell. Warrior for Jesus, all the way, bleed, bruise for God ~Hoo-rah~ my links http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211621
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10-19-05, 06:13 PM | #2 | |||||||
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i dunno kid...the topic was aiight but it didnt rhyme or flow in more than a few spots...needs some work...i think if you would rewrite the piece and add even a sprinkle structure it would be nice...but who am i to judge?
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10-19-05, 08:11 PM | #3 | ||||
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Drop another links or this will be closed
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10-20-05, 09:36 AM | #4 | ||||
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................iono what to say bout it all it had basically was imagry and a lil emotion
other then that i really didn't like it.............it was kinda poetic thoh but i don't really like poetry either lol
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10-23-05, 05:06 PM | #5 | ||||
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as ^ said imagery and emotion were good, and i liked the topic also, i found a flow in it, but i can usually find a flow in anything, lol, keep it up
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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