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03-29-06, 01:44 PM | #1 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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-Too Ill For You, Son!-
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Rey's Dreams Never Come True Spul's This Way, That Way. I'll Swipe You Out The Passenger Side Of Car While I'm Servin The Shots Like Waiters At Bars! Faded Ink, Behind Bars, Baracated To Think Put The Game In Grave Danger And Made It Extinct! Simple Yet Comlex With Mystical Wizardry Picture Me, Kodak Moment.... ....While I Bring Lyrical Imagery!! Disasemble The Industry...Like It's Flexible Chop Up It's Infantry.... ...To Have Parts Laying Right Next To You!! See My Spits Ill Like Contagious Viral Diseases Good Genes In Me.... ...Clean, Startched Up, And Stiff At The Creases!! I Seize This, Rap Game Packed With Iffy Flows Rhymes, Coke Lines, And Dimes In Kinky Clothes!! Crack Spines Through The Path I Strickly Chose I Convay Enough Brilliance To Crack Divincie Codes!! So Back The Fuck Up, I Rip Notes Like Mad Composers I Pack Anthrax, Hand Wrapped..... .....So Stand Back For A Shockin' Enclosure!! |
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03-29-06, 08:58 PM | #2 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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uppin for some feedback................................
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03-30-06, 09:56 AM | #3 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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6 views and no feedback?! wtf?! it's not that hard to read a small verse.
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03-30-06, 10:17 AM | #4 | |
New to RV
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nice drop son!!!
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03-30-06, 10:47 PM | #5 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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wow........that was some real deep feedback
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03-31-06, 12:27 AM | #7 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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thanks for the feedback, yeah i know the flow was a bit choppy.
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03-31-06, 05:04 PM | #8 | ||
Semper Fi
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This was pretty decent slight above average peice. Lines were nice but maybe i need to hear it actually raped to follow through with the flow. But anyways this was pretty decent.
7/10 Rtf on my OM's linked in my sig.(Try shooting for "Back To Buisness" Or "Just Ridin Through")
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04-03-06, 12:52 AM | #9 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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aight man, thanks for the feedback.................
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04-04-06, 07:48 PM | #10 | ||
Sam Dope
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IP:
Nah man, you ain't shit.
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04-04-06, 08:11 PM | #11 | ||
Flyweight
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IP:
this was pretty cool man...besides your first bar bein played..it was nice..
fav lines... Faded Ink, Behind Bars, Baracated To Think Put The Game In Grave Danger And Made It Extinct! Simple Yet Comlex With Mystical Wizardry Picture Me, Kodak Moment.... ....While I Bring Lyrical Imagery!! the rest was coo too, keep droppin man this was a nice read |
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04-05-06, 10:27 PM | #12 | ||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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thanks and ike. screw you
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04-15-06, 01:34 AM | #13 | |||
Sam Dope
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Lmfao, is that why you started shit with me? Because you think I'm Ike? News for ya buddy, I'm not Ike. Wow, you're fucking stupid. |
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04-15-06, 11:32 AM | #14 | |
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I'll Swipe You Out The Passenger Side Of Car
While I'm Servin The Shots Like Waiters At Bars! ehhh decent Faded Ink, Behind Bars, Baracated To Think Put The Game In Grave Danger And Made It Extinct! sorta nice Simple Yet Comlex With Mystical Wizardry Picture Me, Kodak Moment.... ....While I Bring Lyrical Imagery!! no.. played to shit Disasemble The Industry...Like It's Flexible Chop Up It's Infantry.... ...To Have Parts Laying Right Next To You!! ok See My Spits Ill Like Contagious Viral Diseases Good Genes In Me.... ...Clean, Startched Up, And Stiff At The Creases!! lol sorta funny I Seize This, Rap Game Packed With Iffy Flows Rhymes, Coke Lines, And Dimes In Kinky Clothes!! Crack Spines Through The Path I Strickly Chose I Convay Enough Brilliance To Crack Divincie Codes!! cool So Back The Fuck Up, I Rip Notes Like Mad Composers I Pack Anthrax, Hand Wrapped..... .....So Stand Back For A Shockin' Enclosure!! played Overall decent drop.. good job.
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04-05-06, 11:26 PM | #15 | ||
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This flowed really nicely with the way you structured it and used your wordplay. I thought alot of your similies were really basic though. Thought this piece was a great job at self glorification, if you want to brag - this is how you do it. One thing that really annoyed me - How You Capitilized Every Word. overall though i thought the piece was a pretty fun read, couldve used more complexity, but cool nonetheless.
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...483#post2710483
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