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02-10-06, 07:00 PM | #1 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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Cheater!!!!!!!!
IP: 462B B8FE
Before I used to make moves with my knowledge, hard math and equations numbers I used to demolish. Then that all stopped when them spooky eyes ..were over my shoulder I felt his breath, and I shiver, disgusted by the smell ..almost knocked me in a coma. My mind juice draining as his pencil moves my visions started to spin, mind hearing dark blues My fingers twitch, "why you stopped?" the bug said I felt that I was in a hive. I'm starting to get cold sweats smoke started coming out of my mouth "plese stop" feeling thunder from my dark clouds. took my portable sharpner and started grinding my lead, hearing its sounds ease my mind, makes me want 2 ..go to bed. Like a alarm clock "You've got five minutes" It shook me, my body movment got into a frenzy. His pencil stopped "Finish?" My eye's open thinking I was dreaming, then I felt his blood on my hands streaming, lead cut thru his throat ...That what you get for cheating. Actually I wrote this one to a beat and a it's for a collab, I'm thinking of revising it, but before I do that, tell me what you think people.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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02-11-06, 11:50 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 31C2 62EB
Drop two links or this will be closed
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The Competition
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02-11-06, 11:51 AM | #3 | |||||||
You Love My Style.
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IP: 6C3D EA1B
wow........everytime i read your Om's i am impressed this was well put together you still killing people with topicals wow...am feelin this piece nice drop
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02-11-06, 12:00 PM | #4 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 903F 26CB
hmmmm this was aight... structure was kinda fucked up... still flowed nicely... nice imagery, and emotion... You put us right inside the character's head... *nods* good shit... coulda been a lil more drawn out for more detail... but over all this was decent... RTF reply to anything I have posted... OM, song, or battle... 1
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02-11-06, 12:19 PM | #5 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: ACAF CCE3
Will Do Morph and....fuck what's wrong with internet today!? *Makes a thread*
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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02-11-06, 02:39 PM | #6 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: EB1C 5E38
Ya I thought it was good...I liked a lot of it...keep it up.
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02-12-06, 03:41 AM | #7 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
wow at this being closed
closed.
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