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Old 08-04-04, 02:54 PM   #1
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Quick 16-Freestyle

IP: 3E4C EA5E

Standin in the vicinity
of a million enemies
guns cocked
makin sure these cowards drop
from one shot
ima young thug
tryna make it to the pearly gates
but these haters tryna send me
to an early grave
ima mother fuckin soldier
until its over
prayin that my enemies'll drop dead
from a couple shots to the head
my eyed shot red
fillin these cowards up wit hot lead
Im feelin like 50 cent
thats why i send 50
im from the gutter, muthafucka,
where shit aint pretty
if u hate me u can
come and get me
ima die a muthafuckin soldier
reppin 4 my city

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Old 08-04-04, 04:50 PM   #2
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dag, short lines are not always that good, especillay when u got only like 2 to 3 words in a sentence, u wasnt creative ya lines was basic and simple no multis no punch no noting, just work alot harder is all the advice i can give u....

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