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04-11-08, 09:28 PM | #1 | |
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keystyle, peep itt
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Best believe my flows insane Listen to it and itll make you numb like novacaine Try and run up on me and ill blow your brain And if you talkin shit, you obviously aint sober mayne We all know you should’ve thought before you spoke my name But I’ll make your girl wet like shes soaked in rain Burn your house down, and spark a blunt in open flames It aint a joke, nobody wants to croak in pain And if your boys want it let em all know the same But I can see they eyes sayin I hope hes playin LIfes never a dead end, but an open lane And everybody has their sport, just know the game So fuck all you haters, just grab a rope and hang Ill catch all you later, and I wont be tame Your number 2 like pencils, We winners Beat me? You must be outta your tree scream timber! Im a king at this thing you just beginners What I spits so hot, you just see embers Lets just see how I take your girls legs And get in the middle like a referee Its official, this the new blazin ballad So much piff broken up looks like a plate of salad Bring your girl home, and turn the slut backwards Im the exorcist and you faggits just casper Did this fairly quick to the Neck of my woods beat by Lil wayne and Birdman, if you rap it to the beat starting at 0:12 it goes perfectly.
Comments highly appreciated D's backkk
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04-11-08, 09:36 PM | #2 | |
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http://community.rapverse.com/showb...432#post3207432
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3207433
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04-12-08, 01:08 AM | #3 | |
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IP:
this is ok at best. Its really simple bro, nothing stood out to me like, "damn, this kids dope"
I had to think twice about closing it as its on the level of somthing that should be posted in 'cyphers keystyle' But ill leave it open for the fuck of it. The metas in this are weak as fuck. "Ill leave your girl wet like shes soaked in rain' basically a no brainer there. You need to try get alot more technical in your writing, cause this is simple and not good at all. Real talk. |
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05-08-08, 11:21 PM | #4 | |
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IP:
real simple, extend your vocabulary,and work on being a little more creative.
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05-09-08, 11:47 AM | #5 | ||
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IP:
....i don't really like keystyles....
...particularly serves no purpose, but its ok at best, attempted punchlines were basic not really feel'n much of it i guess. well record it and then post it other then that no point in really feeding a verse to an audio that well....isn't audio
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05-11-08, 06:09 PM | #6 | ||
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IP:
It was on some elemtary type shit with the vocab and that salad line was wack, it was average, I wasnt blown away by it but I wasnt saying, "this guy is wack"
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