Alright, I'll be more thorough homie, 'cuz I never lie about feedback to anyone, and I'm a rapper myself, and I put a lot of deep thought into what makes a good track.

What I meant by voice, was exactly that. Your all-naturale voice projection, it's your own, right? Your using the wrong lyrics for it. You can't have some skinny wimpy sounding mother fucker trying to act tough, you'd rather hear him talk about skinny wimpy shit, or it just seems funny and goofy. <- Mike Tyson as example.

Your voice is YOU, if you are angry and you can project it in your voice (letting others know you're angry in the track), do it. I can't label what your voice sounds like but I know one thing, it shouldn't be focused on what you focused on in this track.

"been ill since my dad sprayed his sperm" something like that, is focused all on lyrics and not on truth. You sound like a truth teller. That's about as specific as I'll go. Keep it real man.

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