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This girl means the world to me
i know in my heart it is suppose to be i've fallen in love like apples from a tree when we are togather it sets me free we have fellings on the inside that no one can see when my heart is locked she holds the key when people say there is no hope for me she looks me in the eye and say's she believe's if loveing her is a crime then i've committed a feleony when we make love it sound's like a sweet music melody our love is tighter then the first u. s. colony i would do anything to get to her; ride a horse or swim a sea no matter what people say about it can't be we will always be togather you and me |
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somebody please let me know something about this poem good or bad
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IP: 08BC E1E0
y does it matter if any thinks it good or bad. did u get too express urself and get somethg off ur mind? then y do u care if i liked it or not? the only reason i post on here is so i can relieve myself or all the stress and drama in my life and hopefully relate to some else.
write for urself, if someone just so happens to feel u and understand where u coming from that just an added blessing. |
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thank you cherry for your post and it was very truthful. i did get alot of things off of my chest and these were true meanings
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Narcelus Flawless
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it was aight...like girly up there said as long as you gettin shit off your chest its aight...i'm an asshole critic so heres my criticism...you coulda made your word scheme better and used more complexity in your lines...and try making your lines longer....keep elevating dunny...one
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The Real American Idol
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i thought it was deep. but cherry hada good point. if u feel better after writing that then more power to ya.
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Go ahead. Turn your back on me. Thats when I punch you in the back of your head. Faggot. Fuck wit me once, shame on you. Fuck wit me twice, youre dead. |
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hey, if you are gettin pussy cause of it, ima start writing some r kelly shit
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lol @ill but on the real r&b i thought ya piece was very on point and was feelin it so keep it up nice work dawg
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thanx for the feedback, and that isn't no r kelly shit it's that old school shit like some temptations or somethang like that
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