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Old 06-06-06, 10:05 PM   #1
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ok im trying to elevate on some things cho and past tense tol me to improve my presence and delivery which is what im trying to do so i did this track
any ways chorus and all 3 verses by Locknes
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Old 06-06-06, 10:11 PM   #2
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Hook in the beginning was off beat like a mutha......you need to completely redo that shit man.....First verse wasn't bad, but you need to work on your enunciation....pronounce your words better. It would also help if you had some better mixing skills so all the words sound the same volume. And it sounds like you're whispering at times......just needs some work man....for real. No hate or nothing....
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Old 06-06-06, 10:17 PM   #3
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aight here we gooo...yo!!

alright....if i was you, i'd redo the hook....like tighten it up or something......
you got good flow...the beat is cool i reckon..i like it....not to hype not ot soft and ucky
it sounds like you got good lyrics..but i can't make out what they are really....mixing could help a tad bit.....check out some of the tutorials or cook up your own settings

overall it was a cool track..just some minor things need to be looked at, includign the hook and some better mixing..

keep spitting...
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Hook in the beginning was off beat like a mutha......you need to completely redo that shit man.....First verse wasn't bad, but you need to work on your enunciation....pronounce your words better. It would also help if you had some better mixing skills so all the words sound the same volume. And it sounds like you're whispering at times......just needs some work man....for real. No hate or nothing....

what the fuck all the words did sound the same when i exported that shit
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aight here we gooo...yo!!

alright....if i was you, i'd redo the hook....like tighten it up or something......
you got good flow...the beat is cool i reckon..i like it....not to hype not ot soft and ucky
it sounds like you got good lyrics..but i can't make out what they are really....mixing could help a tad bit.....check out some of the tutorials or cook up your own settings

overall it was a cool track..just some minor things need to be looked at, includign the hook and some better mixing..

keep spitting...

thanks for the feed
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Old 06-06-06, 10:21 PM   #6
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i just notice that soundclick chenges my shit drasticly
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