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10-13-04, 09:57 PM | #1 | ||||
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ALL TO REST (Read it ALL...or just don't look)
IP: 10C3 AE8A
yo PLEASE
read the WHOLE thing especially the 2nd and 3rd Verse I want ya'll to see the real me... if you don't read don't peep or critise...just please read this ....thank you -B.L.A. ALL TO REST my biggest treasure I hold in my possesion isn't quite determind still with life I'm obsessive and Price the pressure...its becomin quite defensive when I try to release its grip it fights intensive no one will listen..unless I say it in rhyme my mind,they playing with mind...I write 2 songs a day these are the tactits while I try to stay signed and survive,only to stay inside the game and and give a little surprise...through the boiling acid I took a dive...I'm never relaxing and I know I got ties to selling fries in ties..even when I hate what I do..I still try to prove... I won't lose...I stay alive...as I sigh and try to provide a ride...try to rap without lies state the truth do not lose in the booth...your pride and maybe you can connect with stress from people worldwide ********************************************* ...theres more past to ponder..just add a comma... yes..................... ...there no laughs and somber...just add a comma... Lets.................... spent time and honor...what we all hae wondered... or lay it all to rest... ********************************************* I look back pass the bad to everything I aquired and run to what I desire...I block out before and try to change what is happening Prior\ and more positive and to add to my score and stay dominate because I stay hotter then,then the trailor that's bothering,I wanna steam every body like a sonna vent ...those who helped me my verses used to honor them,and for them to say I'm proud of him ITS CRAZY I enjoy rap,but still they pay me,I grown up..Like WOW this rapper was recently a baby...I got parents but don't say they raised me I had to leach off other roots like food of a daisy...grace me or say you hate me...I will stay deep...not even a deep noise can base me everyone has a murder or tragedy on they street... millions of kidnappings but we only know of lasey!!! ..I fear soon my body outline will need a tracing ******************************************** ...theres more past to ponder..just add a comma... yes... ...there no laughs and somber...just add a comma... Lets.................... spent time and honor...what we all hae wondered... rest... ******************************************** my do rag tighter then my pants...my stance is disfigured because everybody staring at my hand that's what I can't stand...it was a grease fire is that what you wanted to know man!!! DAMN... EVERYBODY GET A GLANCE thats what life feels while livin in the spotlight it isn't a good life...when the hand you using not right... I try to pop hype...gun rap fans say its not tight too bad I don't bite...at least that will give me time and publicity...time on TV temporary like felicity Yes I can tell all the signals you sending me...but its offending me you tellin me my flaws I sware will be the end of me...end the deed and bring...a new breed of people that isn't into weed my coat t obig for fall...either feell heat or freeze..no middle man to see even when deseat...defends all the grieve...lending them defeat even it all for me... (beat goes off) sending to pause the beat...then you can hear and mabe you can see that I'm rapping with a tear people is crazy now...all the tactics that I fear in this big world...my death will react like its mere... thank you for reading peace
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10-14-04, 04:11 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin this for crits
please
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10-14-04, 04:30 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
yo can i pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaase get some crits?
damn
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10-15-04, 09:33 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
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10-15-04, 10:55 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: 3240 794D
This was dope, you have your own style and creatively made this out to be a dope little drop about you, nice job on this, great vocabulary and emotion in this, keep droppin man..1
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10-15-04, 11:45 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
thanks mami
you should make yo pic yo avy I wish I was yo age I'd b on dat ima crit u and myth's(senario) collab ri now
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10-16-04, 10:28 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
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10-17-04, 12:52 AM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 1BD5 13B2
this was actually one of the better pieces ive seen in open mic...... good job..... although u could of used ALOT OF MORE multies and wordplay to make ur shit even more better.....flow was on point........emotion was there and overall better one of the drops ive seen here.........keep droppin
return tha favor on ma legendary drop....."legend is born" 1 |
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10-17-04, 02:27 AM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
uppin for critisism...
I will soon have aother one coming out...
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10-17-04, 01:49 PM | #10 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
uppin for crits
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10-17-04, 02:36 PM | #11 | |||||||
you gotta hear me again
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IP: 8983 E628
i gonna give this my best rateing yet it was hot as hell ddddddddddddaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmnnnnnnnnnnn 9.5/10
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10-17-04, 03:02 PM | #12 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
nice drop dawg, it would probably have a nice sound in audio, u should consider it. But um.......nice flow nice post keep it up 9/10
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10-17-04, 03:09 PM | #13 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
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10-18-04, 06:09 PM | #14 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin ^^^^^^ ^^^^
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10-18-04, 06:15 PM | #15 | |||||||
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IP: 5043 32F4
Yo that was aight but I lost interest b4 I could finish reading it but I have a small patience. Other than that it was all right; I guess the only question is can you keep up with the emcee's on audio
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