Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
|
View Poll Results: Who won this battle? | |||
DemonHunter | 0 | 0% | |
Knightmare | 0 | 0% | |
Voters: 0. You may not vote on this poll |
|
Thread Tools | Search this Thread | Display Modes |
02-09-04, 12:55 AM | #1 | |
New to RB
|
Knightmare vs DemonHunter ROUND TWO
IP: 3616 9C4A
10 lines min
16 lines max No crew/dr/hate votes I'll spit first this time
__________________
|
|
02-09-04, 01:50 AM | #2 | |
New to RB
|
IP: 3616 9C4A
Look who's back tryin' to pick up his act, tryin to give it another go
I'll bestow you with a second defeat and just make sure you know -My words kill Demons, so you're useless like infertile semen You're only new to a hopeless kid who's been wet dreamin' Swimmin around looking for a chance only to find you're bein jacked off Smacked off, smeared on bedsheets, nothin more, so better back off To me you're like an uncleaned diaper, full of shit, damn the DC sniper If you'd been picked as a target, the shit'd be wiped up, so dont get hyped up If you were a page in History, you'd definately be the Dark Ages Back then nobody knew what they were doing, guys like you'd be in cages If I were a page, I'd be the Renaissance, coz I revolutionize rap like trade And disgraces like you would be sure to get the blade, send this guy some aid If he were a country I'd be sure to migrate, I guess you're a primate You got the vocab of one and you stayed the same, while we became great
__________________
|
|
02-09-04, 02:20 AM | #3 |
New to RB
|
IP: F40A FCD2
Well see ya kinda wrong wen ya wrote ya words kill Demons
see im a DemonHunter not a punter cause i dunt need to bet cause your set in concrete , waiting for defeat get up of ya seat cause wen hear me ya gonna fear me and then your gonna run cause your a demon in my books ya got the same ugly looks , psshhht knightmare u fukin get nightmares! cause your afraid of the dark , afraid to walk threw the park alone ud wish it was noah's ark that way we'd walk in pairs u and ur gay buddy walkin downstairs that way u and him could hit da floor get a little more action and here's the reaction of ur buddy when ya wip ya little fella out he shouts cause even ants seem tall next to ya ballz , thats right u got nuffin there thats why people always stare at the ugly and slow kid (dats you) hehe see dat i had to explain dusnt that make u run in shame that ur the fuked up kid whos gay and lame! proof your slow look at my name it means i hunt demons, and wat the fuk is it with u and semen and jackin off oh i forgot - u like to see men and jack dem off! |
02-09-04, 02:48 AM | #4 | |
New to RB
|
IP: 3616 9C4A
ok, now that we're done, can we please get some votes and oppinions please
thanx
__________________
|
|
02-09-04, 03:22 AM | #5 |
New to RV
|
Knightmare vs Demonhunter
IP: A965 0752
I don't have enough posts to officially vote, but here's my thoughts anyways:
Flow: Demonhunter: Your shit didn't flow very well. I get what you were trying do, but I think you were trying to be too complex. You should start off by using a simpler structure, like rhyming the words at the end of each sentence. By trying to be too complex, your shit didn't really flow well and was hard to read. Seperate each line and try and make them the same length, i.e. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.... xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.... xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.... This would really help; not only with flow but its just easier to read. Knightmare: Pretty good flow here, maybe a little too wordy in some spots, but still good. The multis also helped it flow nicely. Punches/ Personals: Demonhunter: Punches were weak and didn't hit very hard. To write a good punch, your going to have to be more creative with the content and wording. You should also stay away from sex/gay punches, cause' they are seriously played an wont get you many votes. As for personals, they also came weak and far too played/uncreative. I saw that you tried to flip his name, but it was very weak and uninspired Be more creative: check your opponenets profile, and try to use stuff like his name,record,bio, intrests, etc. against him. Also be more direct and try not to talk about yourself. Knightmare: Decent job with the punches and personals. Not bad with the creativity, a few lines felt played though, I.e. the jack off line. Good personal about your guys last battle and his name but would have liked to see more of them. Vocab: Nothing special from either, but Knight's shit flowed good so i'd say it was less of a concern for him than Demon'. Creativity: Knightmare you just came off way more creative than Demon' w/ the entire verse. Demon' your verse lacked any real creativity to make it standout. Again try to be more creative and stay away from the sex/gay punches. Overall: Not a very good battle. Demon', you need some serious work on your punches,personals,structure,and above all your creativity. Don't try to get too complex wit' yer shit. Punches and personals win battles, so just be more creative/direct. Knightmare, not the best verse, but it got the job done. Some alright creativity here, but punches could have hit harder and you could have used more personals. This one wasn't hard to decide , my vote (if I could officially vote) would go to: Knightmare |
02-09-04, 06:24 AM | #6 |
New to RB
|
IP: F40A FCD2
Uppin the thread plus can we have some votes and opinions please!
DemonHunter |
02-10-04, 02:16 AM | #7 |
New to RB
|
IP: F40A FCD2
uppin the thread plus we need some votes please
DemonHunter |
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|