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02-09-08, 03:08 PM | #1 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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Fight Fire with Fire....
IP: 5EE2 AE55
Shamless man changed hands so i could understand,
to become famous it wont be painless but that is the plan. Now on the correct path i smile and laugh continiuous, stimulated in everyway helps depression stay oblivious. Cant believe im really living this, its like a dream come true, recent altered reality has made me forget what i was living through. Temporary holiday it seems from that dark prison i found, but any little blip or lack of concentration will result in arms being bound. But for now mind set free to explore, sudden rush of anxiety, push myself forward defeating the enemy of mine is the priority. panic attacks related to this bad feeling must control my adrenaline, no need for more tablets, it will pass, its only the devil-dont let him in! Daily process of being cautious, 2nd best to something invisible, most days feels invinssable but in princible its existance is not credable. I am not edible, this state of mind will not eat me alive i val, i will not meow im not a pussycat, i'll roar like a lion! well maybe just for now? |
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02-09-08, 03:42 PM | #2 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 5EE2 AE55
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02-14-08, 10:44 AM | #3 | ||||
-da prophit-
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nice shit son, was really feeling it, its a hot drop no doubt and some other shit i read from you this is totally different, first 6 bars were hot son, no doubt, really have no complaints here, u did it the right way, good shit over all 9/10.
keep droppin son.uppin
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02-14-08, 05:53 PM | #4 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 5EE2 AE55
cheers for the feed dude coo. UPPIN..................
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02-16-08, 05:10 AM | #5 | ||||
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i see alot of improvement you've made from past writtens in this piece.....good shit.......keep elevating...~1~
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02-18-08, 10:10 PM | #6 | |||||||
Flyweight
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good spit.. lot of words man.. lol, good tho.. i dont know if u like punches, i do, but like cannibus just use lot of word play n some punches.. but try to use punches.. at least a couple u kno?
only thang wrong wit this piece I am not edible, this state of mind will not eat me alive i val, i will not meow im not a pussycat, i'll roar like a lion! well maybe just for now? kind of stretched out, meow thing was corny to me.. lol, i dont kno 7/10 1
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02-19-08, 05:55 AM | #7 | ||||||||
I made it and il end it
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Yeah last lines corny as fuck dude lol......... |
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02-22-08, 01:28 PM | #8 | |||||
Herb
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^^^i agree with 42 like exactly cept i know that punches are a must in any above average spit, along with a couple metaphors...structure was good had sum multi's some lines were bad and forced, could use sum wordplay but hey decent drop main..
6.8/10.............one |
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03-10-08, 12:43 AM | #9 | ||||
New to RV
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This piece was pretty good. Had all good qualities. Only thing I didn't like was the last bar, it was way off from the rest of the piece. Next piece, take your time and finish it off strong.
Keep Writing.
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03-23-08, 09:38 AM | #10 | ||||
Light Weight
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good
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Ive been keepin an eye on your shit and i have to say youve dramatically improved. I received nice visuals from what you were actually saying and i could see it play out in my head. Nice drop 8/10. Keep working man.
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