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ok song. lyrics were coo. but u rap like your special ed. But its nice. anywho "lyrical masterbater" not sure what that means.

the second guy sounds like the classic whiteboy rapper. that little cartoon voice.

anyway coo song.

yeah im the 2nd classic whiteboy, is that a bad thing lol

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lol I like tha beat...the first dude got no emotion at all....and yes he sounds like he's SPED...but all u gotta do is work on emotion...+ ur vocals are too loud and no overdubs at all sounds plain as hell....production is pretty bad but don't worry about ur production until u get perfect ur flow and all that...lyrics are pretty good at some parts...at others it's real basic....ok the whole section leading up to "lyrical masturbator" was just.....nevermind...."money...this shit aint' funny..kill u when it's sunny..u softer than a bunny" that was wack as fuck lol....

the hook is iight...it's better than the verse....u to the hard P's when u say "power trip" where it pops when u say it....ok the 2nd verse is MUCH better...."classic whiteboy" like that dude said...who cares the shit is nice....overdubs would help ur verse a lot tho....but it was mixed better and ur voice is more bareable to listen to...

overall a decent track....it has mad potential but only if u put some work into it....

peace

first off i dont think this beat is finished is it???? cuz it definitely needs to be filtered and needs a lot of base to make it sound like a real hip hop beat, cuz right now it just sounds like the movie is playin in the background.....umm the first emcee was kinda choppy...flow was ok, but your delivery was off, lyrics were ok.....the second emcee did better, flow was good, lyrics were ok, and delivery was good.....this was a pretty good track, but definitely needs a little more work.....keep doing your thing tho....OnE




I'm Ghost...

alright i just got a $300 mic (borrowed and not giving back lmao) and im recording in a very quiet place away from my PC. We already got the 1st verse done and its sounding alot more powerful. Thx for the feedback i was pretty sure it needed work, just needed some opinions.

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