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Old 01-19-04, 08:17 PM   #1
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Corrupted Visions: I'm Sorry

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Look…I’m sorry for everything I did…I know I messed things up between us…but don’t let it stand in our way…Listen…


I’m Sorry…Nothing can explain how I just feel right now…
It seems your out of my sight now with what I write down…
Cause truth speaks through my words that I did not see…
Everything you said got me…felt like someone shot me…
Then I bursted out in anger, hurting you more than before…
I didn’t see that…but you left and just slammed the door…
I’ll admit that I broke down….and I… I just started crying…
Cause I just thought I lost you….cause my heart is dying…
I pounded the floor with my fist as tears went down my cheeks…
Knowing that I lost you forever and these frowns I keep…

Hurting you I didn’t mean it, Im sorry…
The pain I caused I didn’t see it, Im sorry…
Hurting you I didn’t mean it, Im sorry…
The pain I caused I didn’t see it, Im sorry…

I’m Sorry…Nothing can take back what I said that day…
Probably lost you forever but I don’t wanna head that way…
Cause I love you so much and nothing will ever change it…
When I cry my eyes rain it…but just all of this pain fits…
Cause the things I said I didn’t mean, They were not true…
But my words were like acid to your heart, they rot through…
And seeing your eyes swell up with tears just hurt me…
Cause I knew how much your love was, I wasn’t worthy…
Eyes got blurry, I couldn’t see you leave but I heard you..
Didn’t mean to hurt you..but girl I know we can work through…

Hurting you I didn’t mean it, Im sorry…
The pain I caused I didn’t see it, Im sorry…
Hurting you I didn’t mean it, Im sorry…
The pain I caused I didn’t see it, Im sorry…

I’m Sorry…Nothing can take back the mistakes I made…
I honestly need you here, but all of this fate just fades…
Cause even a lover makes a mistake sometimes though…
You said every heart you lost but you won mine though…
Doesn’t that mean anything to you anymore? I guess not…
Now I just fill with so much pain that my chest rots…
I have a broken heart all because of the mistakes I did…
Now I close my eyes as tears flow out from my eyelids…
Its times like these that I wish you would take me back…
I just want to say that I’m sorry…and I really mean that…
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Old 01-19-04, 08:28 PM   #2
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yea this was nice C. man I think ya used your topic well in this and it was very Good....Ya Structure is Good in this Like it always Is.....ya Flow was the Strong Point in this i think....Ya Have really good Multis IN this some are very Differcult man...so this was really Good and One Of Ya best i think Very Good Work Man....PeacE....
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Old 01-19-04, 09:06 PM   #3
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yo i liked this piece.....very expressive....and good painting a picture for your reader, you stayed on topic nicely....vocab was solid...so was strucutre....and your wordplay i liked alot....nice as piece...good job c keep that shit comin......
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Old 01-20-04, 08:52 AM   #4
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..Another dope piece..what else to expect from you..as aways it is true enjoyement reading your piece..but I must say..you are turning into a softy~~~LMAO~~~
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Old 01-22-04, 03:46 PM   #5
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Hey Thanks For The Feedback So Far, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreicated, Thanks.
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Old 01-22-04, 04:29 PM   #6
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Wow..I'm might have to use this on my ex..
Nicely done..flow and all..verbally..
Concept..a little ehh but still..i liked how u hit it..
Though..at times i lost the flow..but it came back..
Now much else to say..
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Old 01-23-04, 11:49 PM   #7
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Hey Thanks For The Feedback So Far, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.
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Old 01-23-04, 11:55 PM   #8
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That was a touching peace. Good flow and wordchoice. Keep up the good work!............................................. ..............................
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Old 01-24-04, 12:23 AM   #9
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that was tight, it seemed more like R+B...but still tight....i liked the line...
"Cause the things I said I didn’t mean, They were not true…
But my words were like acid to your heart, they rot through…
And seeing your eyes swell up with tears just hurt me…
Cause I knew how much your love was, I wasn’t worthy…"

that line was touching....keep spittin'...peace
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Old 01-27-04, 03:17 AM   #10
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