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11-01-06, 01:24 PM | #1 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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New Ebircs .....randomness
IP: 6C9D D12E
yea..jus 3 verses i wrote b4..spit to a ill beat....came out pretty nice tho
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4616040 links________________________________ http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3100403 tony self http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3100404 enygma
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11-01-06, 02:40 PM | #2 | |||||||
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LoL wtf @ the intro... that was weird as hell...
Iight... Beats simple but perfect since you just plan on spittin Whoa man... breath control... i can hear like every breath you take... Flow seems mad forced lyrics are cool, but your just kinda throwing multis together it seems like 2nd Verses flow bit better than the first but the 2nd half is kinda ehhh again DAMN you did it again on the last verse lol, you started off nice than you switch it up and it sounds forced mang... but LMAO @ "Mmmmmmmmmm kaaayyy" you got your own swager and shit which is cool... but you really need to work on a constient flow
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11-02-06, 01:53 AM | #3 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 6A24 77A2
intro is different its weird but its cool flow is on then off a little bit then back on
2nd verse crazy multis alot of punches in this verse i liked it flwo is jsut kinda off cause you wrote it without the beat this definately isnt your verse lyrics are nice flwo was kinda off lmao at the mmm kaayyy line pretty cool track
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11-02-06, 10:49 AM | #4 | ||||||
...Closer Look...
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...POPs,shud have filtered it a lil!
the way u flow is okl...sorta like ranting or something like that,it kinna takes ur flow off but at the same time is iight! yeah i'm feeling ur rhyme scheme,u had some multis too that were pretty tight beat is okay..just smooth! lmao@ last lines on verse 3...nice nice!
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11-03-06, 08:38 AM | #5 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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IP: 6C9D D12E
lol, no doubt...and yvonne i know i owe u some feed to, ima get @ ya
and my roomie broke my mic stand so i was jus holding it here LOL thx for the feed 1ne
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11-03-06, 02:45 PM | #6 | ||||
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oh no, my boys back...haha some good points and bad points, ya got more confident on the mic, but your flow falls off at times, just keep it together n its gettin really ill
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11-12-06, 01:45 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 5D86 EFAF
lyrics im feelin....flow is unique....
lmao mmmmnn kkkk heard some wordplay in there.....good wordplay....loads of multis......yea i can hear ur breaths to but psshh whateva......least its a sign that u breathin im feelin ur presence when u spit.....its like.....ur a mix of ummm aesop but with better delivery and concepts simple enough to understand |
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11-12-06, 01:51 PM | #8 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: DAD1 8D50
ok, spoken word after those few bars are kinda gay... you just goin on about blah..weird laubgh and shit, but blah.
First verse, is ok.. "spines get crushing" ran out a breath there, which kinda wrecked those solid bars. Shit talk is a ok touch I spose. Second verse is ok, nice rhymes, flows stays on point. Some ok punches. end a this verse is cool. shit talks a bit stupid now..lol... next verse is ok..mmmkkaaayy shits is gay overall its cool. RTF http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=237068 |
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11-12-06, 10:17 PM | #9 | ||||
Sam Dope
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IP: 7BAB 1CDD
beat is dope, lovin how u come right in BEFORE the intro..Really feelin' the beat..Lyrics are dope, but random as fuck. AH, THAT WAS THE POINT! Nice. Where did you get this fucking beat? Overall, dope track. Send me this beat, homo.
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11-12-06, 10:24 PM | #10 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: D165 C8D9
shook me with that intro. i really like your voice. got a nice swagger. a little off beat on the first verse. i like the lyrics though. i guess you were staying true to the song title. the beat is dope. the second verse is dope. i like that same sex marriges line. you flipped that nice. the only thing that kinda bugs me is when i can hear you sucking up your spit every now and then. quality seems nice. im feeling this track. almost downloadable. i thought you were done, but nope third verse. the train conductor line was nice. never heard anything like that before. good track.
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11-12-06, 11:58 PM | #11 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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IP: 6C9D D12E
thx ppl.....i got ya
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