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09-04-04, 05:20 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Mad Dog vs One-Man-Band
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10 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Dick Riding Votes No hate votes And esspecially no Bullshit Votes TOPIC: Death Of A Loved One Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 09-07-04 at 05:20 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
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09-04-04, 05:21 AM | #2 | ||||||
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09-04-04, 05:22 AM | #3 | ||||||
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09-06-04, 10:40 AM | #4 | |||||||
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Topic: Death Of A Loved One. Monday May 5th 2003 (Verse) My dearest Nan I never thought on this day we’d be parting, I was wit a friends house me and our other friends were going to Lancing, A bang on his door @ 08:30am my mom panicked and in tears, She said hurry Tony it’s ur nan…then I knew it I had to face my fears, We were at my place my step dad, my dad & uncle saw u rest, Got the phone call to confirm…that u finally met death, I went cold…my head froze like the ice age I didn’t feel the same, All I could feel is my heart tear apart & me in an agonising pain, I couldn’t comprehend my reaction no emotion but untold sorrow, All I said was this ain’t fair…we burying Granddad tomorrow, My tearducts were locked under key I wanted to but unable to cry, That’s when I got asked to see you to say goodbye one last time, I walked to ur house it felt like an eternity but u were only in the next street, I nearly couldn’t make it to urs…I felt like I had boulders on my feet, But made it dad, John & Uncle Barry stood outside in silence, Dad cried told me to take my time I felt fear but showed it defiance, Walked in the room and u laid there no oxygen mask on u looked like u sleepin, I held ur hand and cried I jus wanted u to wake up and say it’s ok ur only dreamin, But it was true u were cold not a movement losin you was truly unfair, I kissed you’re forehead…and wished u well on ur new journey in a prayer, Went to dads to tell what happened to my brothers and sisters, They broke down I needed to hold them coz I could tell they were gonna miss-ya, Bout 1pm I went home to face fact not said much I jus went to bed, Played the com for a while to divert my pain but all I could think was is ur dead, The Funeral (Verse) Times past and the pain has slightly eased I prepared for this for a while, Tryin to stay brave for the fams hard when u can’t even fake a smile, We parked outside the wrong undertakers 1st but found our way to you, Mom said we’ll follow last I screwed I’m not gonna precede family she never knew, We drove behind my dad I was satisfied coz u 2 were closer it helped, Coz this was ur last journey and we were here to not let u do this yourself, We got to the church and my eyes filled the place was like an over packed stadium, My brain was in shock thoughts came in my mind it hurt my cranium, I got out walked to the church and u were inside the coffin I was gonna carry ya, But couldn’t me and dad were struggling to walk let alone carry ya, The funeral began I was in the third row watchin not takin my eyes off the coffin, So confused was I here or this sum dream cryin one sec then stoppin, Then the curtains closed as they prepared to cremate you this was real, If I could sell my soul to see u one last time I’d sign the deal, Got outside broke down and dad held me but that weren’t what I wanted, I needed u back even if it was to come back as a ghost at our home & u haunted, At the wake we spoke of ur life u had mad respect from the community, U did so much for hospitals schools and most I feel reflected on me, Near the end we drank reminisced it’s when mom said u didn’t mind, I said what do ya mean…she said pics of me and the kids were wit u inside, Today September 6th 2004 (Verse) Over a year now since you were taken but i think in a way it’s 4 the best, Not in a bad way u had many problems wit ur heart and chest, So many illnesses a doc once said u should be dead, U proved him wrong for many years…prolly beat him 2 his death bed, The pains eased but still there and will never go away, Believe me too many vivid memories of you so my thoughts will never stray, Even my son knows about you u’ll play an important role in his life, Like u did in mine coz to me u aint died u jus live live through mine, We even got a special page in the baby book for you and stuck down a picture, I 1st saw it my girls surprise 4 me it only made me remember how much I miss ya, See the pains gone for you now ur free and happy up there wit granddad & family, I know 1 day we’ll re-unite and catch up on old times gladly, But I know u watch me and keep me safe from beef and hard times, That’s why I’m dedicating MY time for you solely in this rhyme, Some things I miss the b/day cards & xmas cards wishin me health and happiness, I hope u know I’m healthy and happy & I remember the good times when I reminisce, Remember the chair u gave me wit the fox to sit on I still got that, It’s still in mint condition and it’s sentimental values priceless infact, So last 2 lines and jus letting ya know that u may be gone but not forgotten, And I thank you for being there 4 me coz without u…my heart would prolly be rotten, I miss you. |
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09-07-04, 04:04 AM | #5 | |||||
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Depressingly joyful Let me tell you a story, that started 6 years ago, In a hospital, enjoying equations, joyous occasions, and yet tears unfold My heart was speared n broke, it the start of a new life, but the end of another… My daughter as she gave her first cries, brought certain death to her mother I was angry, but when I looked at her lyin there, I lost urges to hurt her Couldn’t be a worse birth… No longer innocent, my baby commited murder Everytime I looked away from her, it hit me my wife was gone.. But when I looked at her eyes, I could see em twinkle jus like her moms Inside I was messed… What will I do with out her? Where am I headed.. Then I realized that that baby girl’s smile was my stairway to heaven The big deal The doctors tested, double checked it, and had some queries to give “Im sorry, but without an operation, ya daughter has seven years left to live” My heart was already speared, but now it was pierced n sliced Two times, two innocent lifes……. but death didn’t hesitate rearin his scythe 6 years later - The complication You prolly wonderin what I did, after this started n hit.. Well its getting harder to live, docs said seven years n my daughter is six You cant imagine the alcohol n the shit, I need to be withdrawin the frustration Knowin I could save my baby, my little lady, but cant afford the operation Getting impatient, conscience blairin… feelin nasty Situation red, palms was cold, teeth were raspy Its happnin early, one morning it got serious enough fa me to leave lyin in her bed, heart prollems kickin in, shes struggling ta breathe I saw that it was up to me, got down on my knees, n prayed to the lord above me If I bring a gat they have to listen, so fuck not havin the money Damn.. holdin up a hospital.. nasty sin, but ive gotto save my daughter Ill take her in, sway my nine, then escape north of the border I picked her up gently, poor baby was sweatin as she was bein carried in my arms Out the front door, grab the keys, opened the passenger side n strapped her in the car The trip and the hospital Seems like ive been drivin for an hour… why is this takin so long? Glance at the clock its only been ten minutes, im goin crazy, sweat on my palms My babys struggling.. oh shit.. a red light, fuck that im not stopping I was speeding too.. .. now no doubt I got the cops on me Ah well.. sirens and driving too, all its doin is creatin more adrenaline Lean over to my angel, open the glove box n tell her to take some ventalin “We’re nearly there baby.. just rest… close ya eyes hun” I could see the hospital getting closer, on the horizon Park illegally, but I got my reasons, heat tucked, Im holding my daughter Cats saw us and was like “you cant park there” I didn’t care, just ignored em I went through the automatic doors, and up to the the front desk “my daughter needs help..” . “okay, sir fill these forms and some cheques” I was like.. “naw I aint got much money.. think you could do it as a favor?” She said “Im sorry sir.. its too expensive, go make the money then come back later” The cold act that exposed a cold truth Aight… my hands were shaking and amped, I gave em a chance, and they put me down My babys someone I cant live life without, the time is now, felt for my gat and pulled it out “I need that fuckin operation for her.. shes dying, are you stupid?!. Look at her struggling n’ weak” Pullin a hold up on this place.. Gun to the clerks face.. tears runnin down my cheek The cops were already here, but they hadn’t come in… I was sportin a case of ignorance Fuck ‘em.. The clerk was finding a doctor for me, Cops was on loudspeaker talking jibberish It made no sense to give myself up.. who would I be saving.. fuck being bold There wasn’t much time… I could feel death in my arms, my daughters becoming cold “hurry the fuck up bitch.. whats taking so long?” .. gun was cocked and swaying “im sorry, please don’t shoot.. I cant find a doctor.. the operation is too complicated” “Bullshit…” … … … and then something was odd… took a gasp as my chest locked.. It cant be… “what is it, sir?” … “shutup” … … The warm breathes on my neck stopped Poetic death for an un-fulfilled cause I lay my daughter on the ground, cold, faceless.. I was overcome with unmatchable strife Its too late… shes gone.. Her incandescent self, was now just a shadow of life Fuckin why??! … why her? What the fuck.. this is cos of how slow that lazy bitch be Got up n’ popped her one in the head.. Im gonna die soon.. but its her fault, so I take her with me What was the point anymore.. head outside, without hesitation I cock my weapon My daughter is gone, I got nothing to live for so fuck consequences In a pistol I got 12 shots, 56 police, one round in each that’s 12 dropped That leaves 44, 20 rush to the floor to the aid of the corpses, 24 yell stop Hands above ya head,.. fuck a life time in jail, Id rather be dead I charged and they opened fire.. Blood fell like roses creating patches made of red Floral respect already paid.. I was lowered to the ground in a Casket made of lead ~-~ |
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09-07-04, 04:50 AM | #6 | |||||||||
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uppin this ma fuckin thread 4 them ma fuckin votes
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09-07-04, 07:17 AM | #7 | |||||||||
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uppin this ma fuckin thread 4 them ma fuckin votes
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09-07-04, 08:37 AM | #8 | |||||||||
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and again.............................quit sleepin
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09-07-04, 09:39 AM | #9 | |||||||||
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09-07-04, 10:29 AM | #10 | |||||
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This was feedback posted for Mad Dog
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damn both of you were goood
I GIVE THIS A TIE it was too good i cant see which is beter
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09-07-04, 05:46 PM | #11 | |||||
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Voted For: One-Man-Band
man O-M-B this was a hella good topic and verse.. i really liked ur story.. it was sick... had alot of emotions and good words that used feelings.. mad dog urs was pretty good too... but i think O-M-B had this due to the fact that his verse had a little more feeling and just seemed more exciting... so im gonna vote for omb
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09-08-04, 04:13 AM | #12 | |||||||||
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well im uppin this yet again gimmie sum votes.....
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09-08-04, 08:01 AM | #13 | |||||
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woooooooooooord............... uppin
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09-08-04, 10:40 AM | #14 | |||||||||
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uppin this ma fuckin thread 4 them ma fuckin votes
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