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01-08-05, 04:39 PM | #1 | |||||||
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uncomparible
IP: F4CB 9C09
HOOK:
what u seein' is uncomparable, all these other rapperz are just so terrible so much that they're unbearible u were a hit, sure atleast til' i came into da picture VERSE: all u rapperz do is babble on til' one day u turn da rap channel on and all u see is a rapper that's inspired by ludacris and J-Kwon and guess who dat rapper be, dat rapper defitnly be me and i'm so hungry that i'll do anythin' pay attention cuz there's no way i'll forget to mention i spit verses dat release all ur tention even if i do spend all my time in school detention i'm nuthin but trouble cuz i stunt more than a stunt double and i'm bout to blow up bigger than a cunt bubble but let's put all the trouble behind me cuz i'm lookin fo' a contract to sign me HOOK: what u seein' is uncomparable all these rapperz are so terrible that they're unbearible u were a hit, sure atleast til' i came into da picture |
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01-08-05, 04:56 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
nice drop.......................keep bring dat strong shit
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01-08-05, 05:39 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
aight, you did some things right and some wrong
1st,I like anyone who loves rap enough to do an open mic.. so I'm actually proud of you and your crew for doin OM's 2nd..just fix your structure..try changing the font and centering it..thats what I do... big ups to you and LNL 3rd..just re word some of your lines you used som ok phrases..but use more emotion and I'll admit the cunt bubble line was funny so you didn't do too bad..and plus your new ps..
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01-08-05, 05:40 PM | #4 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 838B 916B
ok drop, some all right rhyme's in this. flow could be a bit better by evening your structure a bit.
wasnt feeling this line. and i'm bout to blow up bigger than a cunt bubble. this was funny, yet you drop was on a mor serious note. try using multi's.refer to tutorial's,one man band multi section) overall 6/10 keep dropping. remeber to add you link's other wise this will get closed. return the feed check the link in sig. |
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01-08-05, 05:45 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: F4CB 9C09
kool thanx fo da tip homies i'll try to follow what u told me i do this mostly for the feedback as u can tell so it helps me alot when i get some escpecially when it's more deeper than a simple it was good and shit like that keep up tha tips and feedback and u'll leave me a more talented rapper every time
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01-08-05, 06:13 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 2D1D 0D26
That Shit Was Sick.Keep It Up.
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01-08-05, 07:22 PM | #7 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: F4CB 9C09
uppin fo' feedback playaz
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01-08-05, 07:29 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 7696 4EB2
yo, all i can say is.....to me it seems like you missin like 2 lines at tha end.....in otha words, you got 14/16 lines here.....but it was cool witout i guess.....6/10 keep it up 4real
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01-08-05, 08:39 PM | #9 | |||||
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IP: 6462 2169
Dis was nice but to me,it seemed like ya hook and verse didnt go together
dat much.But it was still hot.I really wanna hear da beat to this Keep it up Young Mix |
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01-08-05, 08:48 PM | #10 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: F4CB 9C09
yo thanx man i was thinkin da same thing earlier but that's ok both still kick ass
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01-09-05, 01:49 AM | #11 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: F4CB 9C09
c'mon now keep up da good feedback
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01-09-05, 02:28 PM | #12 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: F4CB 9C09
let's get some more feedback
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